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    rialm3yr
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    I read the prologue and the first chapter. Cannot really say anything about updating stability and story development at this point in time. Character design seems interesting, I like the premise overall. You might want to get a spell checker or word for writing quality. For example in chapter 1 there's 'Reyanto ,Earth' instead of 'Reyanto, Earth'. These little typos can be avoided by using such tools. Also, sometimes there are phrasal verb mistakes such as "check out on" in the prologue. Happens to me as well. Those nitpicky things aside, I really like your premise. I love powerful MC romance stories and Lucifer certainly seems to have a domineering aura. Looking forward to seeing more.

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    Play God (raw/unedited)
    Fantasy · BatLord
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