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This is a really good read so far, not only are all the basic aspects (extremely)good(grammar, clear lines of thought, difrentation between thought and speech, etc..) the actaul novel itself is fresh, like a breath of air on top of a mountion after being in an airtight room for hours, It has a level of realism which iS not to the extent of which of being annoying but keeps the novel within bondaries of being random, The character springs into action at first but when finally given the time to rest, he is hut by the total realiZation Of the apoclypse, the emituons are good and the writing so far is amazing, i might be a bit late but keep it up
This sorta sounds like a my Vanpire system rip-off, (but this Is only yhe Forth chap) and it has a bunch of similarities, although these are Inevitable with a vampire-apocalypse Setting, Both are set within a military type training Place, both mcs are bullied and powerless at the start, both have a female helper that accepts thier situation waayy too fast and go along with mc, and the mc in this one seems like he will also go get revenge and be sadistic
Sooo isnt this just basically the orqcle paths but fantasy and worse?
Like i get it, fast pacing is great and im a fan of fast moving action packed books but this is too fast. the pacing is irregular, paying attention to the smallest not-needed details in one chapter and in the next skipping 6 years. we need more info on the training and magyca too, we got the names and no personalities, whilst the mc is acting like he is buddies with people who have barely been inteoduced
Bruuh if his stats are so high how fid he get tited so esily hes over 500 he should be super powerful like able to take down small armies powerful