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Phodoodles

Phodoodles

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to Jubysleua

    He's a strong kid (。•́︿•̀。) its just that he got lucky he met Ein

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to Jubysleua

    Thank you so much for reading on

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to Seralis

    Ngl, but SP really was cute in the novel so I used that as reference for the feels XD

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to Austrinum

    I blame my brain. Its programmed to stop at cliffs and then proceeds drafting a diff chap kek

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to InfinityR

    thanks for reading on!

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    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to InfinityR

    Awshucks thanks so much for reading on! :D

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to SavageNo1Fan

    Thanks for reading on!

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to Austrinum

    Thanks for reading on! :D

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to MikruZero

    Thanks for reading! :D

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to tuba_san

    Thanks so much for the insight! I actually am happy for honest Reader/Author review swaps. I'm actually in the process of revising the initial chapters as I finish the first phase of the novel and Heck yes! I cringe so much at my writing so badly, sometimes I doubt myself if I truly wrote this sober or was it when I was drunk. XD LMAO I'm planning on adding an auxilliary chapter soon. ;D I just need to rev up on my revisions and probably iron out some of the lore stuff too. So the Aux chap would be fairly easy to follow.

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to MikruZero

    May the pointers I gave you help you improve your writing. So sorry to hear about your keyboard. I actually type on the phone too and I do recommend using online spell checkers/grammar checkers to help that too. :D

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
    Replied to Drapho

    Glad you enjoyed it

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  • Phodoodles
    Phodoodles3yr
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    I'll be honest, but the first initial chapters were a bit of a struggle to read. Maybe because of the grammatical mistakes and misuse on tenses and adverbs. Not to add, I noticed that the author tends to be redundant too. And that made my eyes feel tired. (Imagine reading a paragraph that repeated the word "kill", "left", "walks" 5+ times) Although there was a slight improvement from chapter 13 onwards, I recommend that the author should be vigilant on proofreading and improving on your vocabulary to remedy that. Lore-wise, I like how the author thought about how to make his "system" uniquely his by adding his own touch. I liked the way how he fashioned the quest part especially. The Story & Characters though... is a bit lacklustre. Either that or the pacing was a bit off. Especially when it came to the MC's interaction with the opposite gender. I really saw him as a thirsty dude despite his dialogues were rational sometimes. Also the murdering parts and the implied pinning (well it is a harem) were a little awkward and robotic. I think using realistic references and putting genuine emotions would make those better. Although I pity Kite for being thrown into the fray of the system but still, some parts on his character development may need work since I don't feel that attached to him. (or maybe because I got irked on some of his questionable actions)

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