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Plot seems interesting so far, grammar is decent and not much can be said about the baby MC for now. Atleast he doesnât seem to be an edgelord so that is a plus. But what does bug me is the constant shift in POVâs that happens 3-5 times in a chapter. This wouldnât be so bad if the chapters were around 5-10k words but with only 1-2k it is literally 300-500 words and a shift. It constantly breaks the immersion of the reader and the author could have easily dedicated a whole chaptee to the different POVâs instead of making this bothersome constant jumping between characters.
Serafall would be disappointed with you Sona-tan.
Plot is below average even when it comes to wishfullfilment OP Mcâs. The MC is nothing really special, you wonât exactly hate nor love him, he is just there. Story is kinda clumsy and monotone and what bugs me more than anything author couldnât be bothered to use proper punctuation like any normal person that has been through elementary school. Instead of basic quatation marks ie. ââ, the author uses [ ] to mark speech in paragraphs which is annoying as h*ll considering most use ot for system remarks or voices inside a characters head, instead of regular speech. Grammar is meh aswell, itâs readable but you can find mistakes quite often. All in all, if you can find something better, you shouldnât bother with this fic. Personally Iâm scarping the bottom of Naruto fic barrel so here I am, left fisaapointed once again.
Writing quality is good and the grammar was decent. The plot worked out as well but what really made this disappointing is the attitude of the MC. He is like teflon; nothing sticks. No meaningful relationships, just pure indifference or some negative emotions which led to no character development and made the experience of reading this kinda dull.
Because you have had five years to come to terms with your new reality and what it entails and make an informed decisions based on the facts you know from your previous life. If in five years you havenât been able to make up your mind then that is simply on you.
This is an average story. Plot is bland with MC becoming OP in his early years, which isnât bad per se for an OP MC story but the MC has some very naive dreams considering the world he is in. He fits more to be a slice of life MC than a shinobi in Narutoverse. Then the second point that bugs me is that the author doesnât bother to explain the system at all to the readers. Yes, itâs a template readily copied from the web but still, author just assumes readers are familiar with it, and if they arenât, well too bad since there wonât be anything in there to explain it to you.
Yeah⌠lets just see how he suddenly forgets who Obito and the Akatsuki are. How he will probably forget Orochimarus attack on chunin exam. Probably will be surprised that Naruto is his classmate. Wakes up to suddenly finding he has a Gramps he forgot. I have no faith in this skill.
Just delete the int stat from MC, he clearly canât be bothered to use it.
Please tell me the lack of sudden critical thinking without gamers mind is not a permanent thingâŚ
When his int increased, didnât his memory get better and he could remember things from his previous life that he already forgot? Now you are telling me he LITERALLY FORGOT ABOUT NARUTO PLOT POINTS, the one most important thing to keep track of? If you want to use foggy memory to push plot, then please try to do so without it being inconsistent with MCâs own abilities.
The story is slow, the Mc is a moron; like who mutters insulting words when one of the sannin is walking past them with her family? And like for real, who even mutters their inner thoughts aloud? Such a cliche that it seems to be taken right out of a chinese ff. If this is a translation, then my bad I must have missed it. Anyways, by the pace the story is going nothing interesting will probably happen before 100 ch, so wait until then to even give this a shot.
Making the Lannister twins proud
Decently written and updates regularly from what I scrolled through. As for plot canât say much since the decisions of the MC didnât really agree with me. First strike (and the most moronic in my opinion) was when MC just up and decided to tell the manager of an orphanage that has taken care of him for barely a month that he is a wizard, when his Hogwarts letter arrived. Simply because he didnât âwant the Hogwarts staff to decieve herâ. Correct me if im wrong but that should be grounds for obliviating the manager, right? I donât recall Tomâs orphanage caretakers ever being aware of him being a wizard, they just found unnatural things happening around him but never knew anything for sure. And what bugs me the most about this is the fact that this is supposed the third life of the MC. One in the âregular Earthâ, one in the Avatar world and now HP world. Dude should just yeet himself to afterlife with this level of stupidity and naivety. Now the other decisions were not as major as the first but as it accumulated, the frustration to the moron grew and I decided to simply drop this and warn future readers; DO NOT EXPECT A SMART MC!! Several lives were not enough time for him to learn self-perservation and common sense.