evilantonio430

review swapper here. I enjoyed the narrative I read so far, and look forward to more releases. keep up the great work, it is a fun read without a doubt!

review swapper here. I enjoyed the story, and look forward to seeing where it goes. if I had one complaint, it was that the reading felt a big clunky; although, this may be my own stylistic preferences as a writer talking. keep up the good work!

review swapper here. the book was lovely, although I don't know what advice to give to mature works, so apologies in advance. still, I can definitely say I both read it and enjoyed it...

steamy! I would move the mature content warning to the bottom of your synopsis, though. they have done seminars on synopsis writing at the discord, check it out if you have the time.

review swapper here. Although I only occasionally read romance novels, I like what I've seen this far. the first person narrative is an especially bold choice, I can't wait to see how you utilize it!

I'm not sure I am a fan of the virtual reality genre to begin with. While I found the premise of the book interesting, it ultimately still lost me at certain points due to my own troubles with suspension of disbelief.

you have a bit of a run on sentence here

while the exposition at the very beginning felt a little stilted, and there were some grammatical errors, I found the story hooking me by the end of the prologue alone. the zone itself is fun and reminds me of what a modern day sequel to escape from new york, and the character interaction is strong and engrossing. if I didn't have twelve other review swaps to do, I would certainly stick around and read further

I can't thank you enough for such glowing praise. please continue to enjoy my work for many weeks to come!

I see that you've quickly addressed the different issues I brought up. since it looks like NJ is indeed the place, I'll give one last localization tip. when I was a kid living In new jersey, we would take the ferry to get to NYC, not a train. to be honest, I am not even sure a train connects the two. then again, amtrack is huge on the east coast, so there might be a stop on its route up new england. I'll also further state that part of the reason we'd take the ferry is because it can ferry your car across with you. thus, as teens with no car, they very well could use a transport I wasn't familiar with. I guess to summarize this rambling critique, I feel it'd be more realistic for them to take ferry and then subway, but don't quote me on it.