M_Mariegold

hi long time no read... I want to say that. you forgot to put '?' at the end of the word. since he's asking question. therefore you should put question mark.

I really like the works and Grammar that you used. I really like the writing style except for abuse that are used. When I first read I felt like I'll get bored soon. But you book is like a glue. I learned many thing from this book and I really really enjoyed it.

There is a mistake in this parah 'uou'

make sure to put space after every new sentences, after full stop.

I meant the dialogue. haha

My mouth is filled with water, after reading this paragraph. @_@

I think you missed a word 'started looking at me...'

superman....

I think there is a mistake 'Good, now'

Hi there... there is a mistake in first line, Use 'Placed' instead of 'places'.