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should be => "seemed to "lose" all suspense" (not "losr" all suspense). the difference is because of the author including the phrase "seemed to..." which is current tense. if it was a simple part tense, then "lost is fine ("the match lost all suspense"). But you cannot mix both current tense (seemed to) and past tense (lost) together. As "lose" is current tense, that can be paired with. "seemed to".
"succinct" makes no sense, as that means "to express ideas or facts clearly and in few words." which doesn't apply to fruits. it more likely should be "succulent", which means "tender, juicy and tasty".
Ves pulled the "cord" (like a rope) , not a "chord" (which is a series of complimentary musical notes, all played at the same time)
purple "robe" (not a purple "rob", whatever that might be! )
although more likely, "didn't want to die" (instead of "day")
"didn't want to say..." (not day? )
should "he" ever appear again (not "should be ever appear again")
"many wrongs for him TO right...." (missing the word "to")
this whole chapter is incredibly poorly written, and needs a lot of revision.
this is likely the invisibility cloak that mentor Wales won off mentor Jack when Howard's team was attacked by all of the students in the woods....
freezing should read "unfreezing", since he can now reach for his battle axe
So where did this SSS skill magically appear from? The main character did not synthesize any skill books together. The author just suddenly started to describe the SSS skill without giving us any idea where it came froM, Or how the MC obtained it. Rather odd....
it makes no sense that SS skills would be more rare than SSS skills, as SSS skills are higher ranked. it seems the author got this backwards.....
ok, this is a sad / not good way for the author to write. there are so many ways to say the mantis suffered significant damage, and not say that the damages value simply appeared above the mantis' head like a first person shooter or Mario game....
ah... but here, OP's "unyielding dragon" means something completely different from his for drain... lol....
adding the sound as what appears to be part of the characters' dialog (like "whimper" or "heave" as if sometime is throwing up) is not good writing
like = link (he didn't see a "link" leading back to the main body)
"fortunately" (not "UNfortunately"), the Demon King was no longer at his full power....
the guards are deaf, not blind.
Unintelligible words, not ineligible words