Azure_warrior
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Tobirama wasn't shown to be that dependent on his Teleportation Jutsu like Minato. Minato's whole fighting style and even his identity are related to Flying Thunder God Jutsu. In the anime, we clearly see him using this Jutsu for day-to-day activities. On that topic - I kind of wonder why he didn't just teleport away with everyone while being surrounded by the enemies. Instead, he went to sacrifice himself to save Sarutobi, Danzo, and others. I don't know if this is a pothole or not. Or maybe I am completely wrong here. You could create theories based on why he didn't use teleportation to get everyone out of danger including himself. This might give you the difference between Minato's and Tobirama's teleportation techniques. Theory 1. Maybe, unlike Minato, Tobirama cannot teleport with multiple people at once. I would have liked to say that he cannot teleport with others but we have seen him teleporting with Naruto and Sasuke in the 4th great ninja war. 2. For this point, you can add it to the first point - Tobirama is incapable of teleporting long distances as fast as Minato could. He cannot teleport long distances with more than one person. As his version of Teleportation Jutsu consumes more Chakra and puts more burden on his body. While Minato has tackled these problems after taking inspiration from Tobirama. This might explain why he did not use teleportation Jutsu. -- I hope these things help. Love your story
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Bro this novel is good but please keep your rants at the end of the chapter. I don't usually comment but this is getting really bothering. After reading your rants, I lose interest in reading the chapter. I think many other readers feel the same.
I see. Then you can do it at your own pace. Compared to the first few chapters, I really feel that the quality of this novel has increased. Your writing has gotten better.
I really appreciate you writing such long chapters. I just have one issue. I feel like you’re making each paragraphs too big. It’s difficult to read. Maybe try making them shorter.
I don't think he will. Adding this Anime will make a lot of things complicated after the MC is shown to be a merchant this time. He isn't a fighter. Maybe he can hire one of the strongest female character from that anime or something similar.