“Don’t bend; don’t water it down; don’t try to make it logical; don’t edit your own soul according to the fashion. Rather, follow your most intense obsessions mercilessly.” — Franz Kafka
Sup~ Author here :D I wish for you to enjoy my novel :D I know that I'm not that good at grammar, as you can see there's so much error that needed to be fixed because English is not my first language, I just want to make my own story so all I can ask is for you to enjoy... If you can hahaha. Free to leave your comment, review and you can criticize if you want I'm open for suggestion and advice Thanks :D
no really appreciate that you are taking your time telling me this, I really want to improve my writing and the story itself so thank you for pointing those up, I'm always open to criticism, advice, and suggestion thank you for leaving a review and liking the story even though I have a lot of error.
he can use his bloodline and its 50% too that why there's an [Limited] in there and reincarnating him to a new body will take much more time to make as I want to make my story fast phase and it's not like I don't want to show the integration process I just forget it those benefits are needed since he was orphan in the past should I make him orphan again? that's why I gave him a family and like to start the story where he is already grown enough for his bloodline time is all he needs once he gets a body that can handle such power, everything needs time to develop even if I gave him the strongest power it needs a balance that's why he was training his body for. I'm sorry if the story is not for your liking it just how it is. I'm sure you can find a much better story than this novel I'm somewhat new when it comes to writing a novel that's why there's a plot hole everywhere you can try and read another novel that you like because this is how the story goes and there are only 13 chapters were still not even in the main story were still at the development phase.
yeah, I get what you mean but like I said he needs to have a proper body and be a perfect vessel to use those power because if he uses then while having those kind of body like the titanic strength it will backfire at him also for his immortality I already change it to Eternal Life and I get what you are saying for him having a racial ability but I did say that his body can't even handle the current power he has, it's not that he can't use his abilities it's just his body that's the reason for him making his body a perfect vessel for his power. it has a purpose and he reincarnates to a normal human his race 'titan' also needs time to completely integrate at his body similar to his 'legacy' that slowly devouring his human race.
Yeah if he dies he will be resurrected in different timeline maybe 100 years or so, also he will age the same as human and also that restriction is also a penalty the MC should not take the light of being an immortal, because If I am immortal why would I care if I die today? I will just resurrect instantly that's the reason why every time he dies (Depends on how) he will be revived years after.
It has a restriction that even though he is 'immortal' he will still age like normal, normally an immortal will stay the same even hundreds or thousands of years, I'm an idiot at that time I didn't explain it clearly also I change its name It's 'Eternal-Life' now because it doesn't make sense to keep the name so I change it.
I gave myself a 5 star, but whatever. This will be an honest review coming from me just inform the newcomer of what to expect in the story of this novel. As you may know, this is a 'Fan-Fiction' that takes place in MCU or Marvel Universe. First of all, the main character is called 'Axel Summer' the story will be very detailed and a little bit slow, and this story may also have some plotholes in the story but do not worry. Because I'll make sure that those plot holes will only be a minor and not important at all. Expect some error, misspelled, wrong grammar in some chapters. (maybe all of them) But I will make sure to improve my self when it comes to those things because 'English' is my second language and this story is the only second novel I created and the other I just stop writing it, but this time I will make sure to finish this story and give it some good ending. The current story (ch.11) is still at the earliest part of the main story and the other superheroes (Batman, Superman no I'm kidding) I would still take at least 10 or 15 chapters before we can start the main story that is the Disappearance of Tony Stark, that is where the real story begins, but don't worry about the other side you will witness the growth of Axel powers and ability. Also, I will tell you that I would add some characters, events, or something in the story this is just for fun and its not actually true and didn't exist in the real Marvel Universe, I'm just adding that to make the story more interesting and fun and because of that the powers and strength of the character here will be a 'LOT' stronger than the movie. I wish you to understand that I'm only a single person, I write the story and also edit it, it actually takes me at least 2 hours when I'm in the mood but usually, it takes me at least 3 to 4 hours. I'm happy to do this actually, reading your nice comments, advice, and suggestion I can't ask for more, so I'm thankful that you like this novel. If you want to support me you can see the Auxilliary Chapter you can find there where you can donate to my Pat reon that is if you want, don't waste money on anything, don't waste your money on me hahaha, Here's my link to Pat reon: https://***.pa treon.com/OPxSILENT