I actually struggled to read this, the idea is cool but the writing is god awful, it's just way to cringe and it feels as if it was written by a child. overall not bad but definitely not for everyone

It was a cool idea but I'm convinced the author hasn't watched or read naruto, it's not even AU at this point, author is just making shit up

it's not horrible but it feels like it was written by a child, the dialogue is weird and a bit cringe at times, and the story is extremely fast paced with the mc being able to run faster than light a couple chapters in but other than that it's decently solid

+1

thanks for the chapters

thanks for the chapter 👍

thanks for the chapter 👍

thanks for the chapter 👍

I thought hypnotic would be a good father after the whole rehab situation but I was wrong, hope he gets some of that endeavor character development

thanks for the chapter 👍

thanks for the chapter 👍

just because you don't know that you're doing something wrong doesn't mean you're not doing something wrong, in the newest chapter he literally killed hundreds of thousands of people you can't just excuse that by saying he didn't know any better

thanks for the chapter 👍

good luck and keep up the good work 👍

thanks for the chapter

+1

thanks for the chapter

thanks for the chapter, I really love what you did with his eyes honestly didn't expect that at all

just want to say that I really like this book and that I hope my comment didn't come across as rude or anything like that also just read chapter 7 and I really enjoyed it, keep up the amazing work 👍

honestly can't even feel bad for the mc, he's past the point of redemption and the argument that he's a child doesn't really work after he killed an innocent family, I really like the story so far but If it keeps going like this it's probably gonna be pretty bad, I just can't see where this is possibly going bc they is just no way the mc can be a hero after this, and if he becomes a villan he wouldn't really have any good reason of motivation