no harem pls

This gives pedophilia vives. MC is 12 year old in an adult body with adult memories and thinking about an underage girl. Its really disturbing. Good concept bad execution.

Esdeath is a good antagonist.Curious to see how it works out.

Pretty good fic. Unique idea for a marvel fic. I like the protagonist as he is very easy to root for. If there is no op protagonist bullshit then this will be one of the best marvel fics out there.I just don't like the fic name ,seems too generic for such a good read. Hats off to the author .

Just a typical marvel fic. No character development, Already OP MC, Interactions feel forced and confusing. 50 chapters and I feel that the story is barely progressing.If u have an OP MC i would expect world building or politics but this story fails to deliver both in any satisfying way. Any action the MC does feels like it doest have any consequence because he is op.

where would the story even go if he already has everything given to him. u r just writing a bad fan fiction if u give infinite money or high intelligence. just make him a regular dude that knows the story.

go with slice of life. show family interactions more. try and involve more in story and change original plot. make it more funny if u can.

try making mc work for anything. eg show mc practice for b-ball or show mc researching with tech stuff.and please dont make harem

k

thats the thing u can only go for better armor or more power. the character never grows. sure he might suffer some setbacks but he will always suceed. he is already this strong when starting out and will progressively get stronger till there is noone left to defeat.

i like the story but i think mc is getting over powered. like it is not even 20 chapters in and mc is already more powerful than regular spiderman. i really dont see how mc would grow more. i think the super adaptability and genius intellect is way too overpowered cause he would instantly find weakness of villain or adapt to their powers.and the loving sports thing was not explored in early chapters it just comes up and mc is already good at it.personally i dont like mc having a harem but it is not a harem so i like the story but u introduced all the hot girls so i am confused. u write like u want a harem.

i would actually like to see governments taking solid steps to combat supers. for example employing supers like mha. just dont want government to be passive while heros and villains fight. also us military in marvel and dc has pretty good characters like amanda waller, general ross. u could use them and make the story more complex.

sound powers and oto-nin are gud concepts but the story moves too fast. worried that the future will be bad. and system is not necessary if all skills can be self developed.

include more gadgets