https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12111462/1/Naruto-Uchiha-Chronicles ORIGINAL HISTORY .......................................................................

This story started very well, the development speed is very good. ..........................................................................

I look forward to the development of the organization. Don't be discouraged, otherwise I won't have anywhere to leave my Power Stones

The story is good and deserves a high rating on the platform. The biggest problem with this FANFIC is the stupid and uncreative comments, where many complain about things like 'useless chapters', 'premise of God's desire', 'limited Greek mythology'. Comments that occur because the person commenting is an idiot or because they haven't read any of the 99% fanfics on this site.

Rosalie

Another copy of https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12304864/1/Dead-Man-Walking? ................................................................................

Original fanfiction: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12304864/1/Dead-Man-Walking . https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12304864/1/Dead-Man-Walking . https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12304864/1/Dead-Man-Walking

sacrifice is the interval between goal and glory

A miracle happened, a fanfic on this site that is not shit, I was already losing hope. The fic is well written with good language and good dialogues. Update stability is good and makes up for short chapters. The story unfolds in a way that the mc fits the events looking believable and without exaggeration. The character is well crafted and has some evolution as the story progresses, the canon characters seem to have a personality quite befitting the canon as well.

Boruto doesn't exist

The story is good so far, well written and fits perfectly with the world of naruto. The biggest problem with this fanfic as well as many others is the size of the chapters, they are tiny and each event is separated into several chapters consequently ends up losing all the hype of the chapters.

just above you said they were intangible, how to change density to something intangible?. this part was very confusing.

you can try the vector fruit too

plagiarism..............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

very good! keep the harem small, for the DXD world these characters maybe add one or two, they already have a good size and you can keep the relationships between the characters well built.

the only interesting thing about this fanfiction premise was the uzumaki clan, something undeveloped. where the chains are and working with the famous seals of the Uzumaki clan. I still don't understand why introduce magic into naruto's world, it takes all the charm out of the work.

the only really bad point in your story is the harem (or it can become a point), with three girls you can hardly write a good story, but it's still possible. Above 3, the depth of relationships becomes non-existent and ends up looking like a pokemon with women.

just go to the comment paragraph and there you can copy the link.

here is the barrier that limits authors.

he would have Slytherin blood from the start. in that case, it would be a dispute between heirs to see the fittest. otherwise, whenever there was a battle between mages, the victor would inherit the opponent's house. example: a random guy defeated draco malfoy and became heir to the malfoy house by conquest. that wouldn't make any sense.