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adam_953112dPostedI got to rate this low because within the first 3 to 4 chapters the MC is stupid as well as the plot, he gets thrown into the world gets a light saber instantly loses it in a stupid way, to Jamie fucking lannister. After i read this chapter i had to have a break before I broke me phone reading it. maybe this just my preference, but I can't see anyone liking the plot, and seeing as this is a fan fic that's all the writer is doing, although I'll say the writing quality is ok. I can understand putting these to worlds together is a hard task but in my eyes it's gone in a completely wrong path to what it could, like; training with Starks, becoming king of the free folk, travelling to essos.
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honestly this bit has gone on to long and I've skipped most of it, doesn't feel like there's any need for any of this
In that brief moment of relief, Firefly felt an immense wave of gratitude toward the Cleffa. She got to her feet, her body glowing as she prepared to unleash another Flamethrower on her disoriented foe. But in a horrific turn, Weavile, driven by vengeful fury, lunged at the retreating Cleffa, its claws finding their mark and skewering the small Pokemon without a shred of mercy. - adam_95315mthReplied to ALEX1402
yeah this seems a bit much
In an instant, another Clefairy lay defeated. Weavile's blood drenched claws had found their mark, and the small pink body lay lifeless on the ground. The remaining Clefairies hesitated, their faces reflecting a blend of terror and hopelessness. They had lost too much to simply flee, and their resolve, though shaky, held them in place. Or maybe it was the fear, Emmet was not quite sure. - adam_95315mthReplied to Bob_Uchiha_XD
completely agree with you, unfortunately I'm one of the people who absolutely dispies the use of unnecessary scene where characters are r*ped, assaulted for a impact on the writer when it's uneeded.The is a fan fic people know game of throne is ruthless, my opinion no one has to agree.but it makes me feel physically sick.
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was enjoying the novel till now, there are other extremes writers can take, not making the readers sick and discucted from reading things like this.
"Not that kind of hunger," Steffon Baratheon chuckled. - adam_95315mthCommented
hope MC just kills him in the next page or sooner
"My lady, as the days come to pass your beauty only elevates further." The Master of Coin added quite charmingly. - adam_95315mthCommented
i don't like some of these changes, doesn't fit the characters well I think, either way puts me off this novel.
"Identify yourself," Robb Stark growled, blanket slipping down his torso - bare due to the temperatures in the south. Fingers shaking, Margaery managed to complete the task of lowering the hood of her cloak. Hard eyes widened in surprise. The knife lowered. "Queen Margaery, what are…?" Suddenly self-conscious, Robb covered his torso with the thin blanket. - adam_95315mthCommented
honestly this is really annoying, just kill all the ironborns and be done with itshould have done it in the first place
|Euron Greyjoy - High Admiral of the Iron Throne and Lord Commander of the Iron Fleet| - adam_95318mthCommented
just kill superman already this so annoying
"That's enough, Black Bolt," Batman said, stepping out of the portal. "He's already defeated." - adam_953111mthCommented
you basically ruin the whole premise of the starting plot line he has nothing none cares about him and he's left to dieing, but I'll get strong and all that. but now random character comes into his life and he accepts like nothings happen, personally I would stay away and ignore anyone with previous relations. might drop this one
Ch 3 Chapter 3 - adam_95311yrCommented
main point in writing a story is to make it enjoyable, and I understand sometimes there down and up in them but when it's not needed or pointless it really annoys me. I guess this is a easy way for the author to say MC isn't going to rush to the top and have easy, at least make it realistic, fun and interesting
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that was lame
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not sure about this skip a part of me wanted to drop this story, think it ruins the indepth feeling
'It's been a long long two years since I woke up to this new life and finally, it's time to, as they say, step into the action proper.' I think as I watch Professor Snape rush into the hole under the Whomping Willow.