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As such, I didn't see romance here (if you're talking about romances with the main character) There were only hints, but maybe there is already romance. I quit reading this fan fiction when the protagonist became the head of the village
Of the most important characters, he killed Orochimara, Danzo, and Sarutobi. All. They are already being killed in almost every fan fiction. This is not unusual.
Author, decide on the character of the hero. He is a murderer who kills ordinary residents who did not harm his comrades or a stupid idiot who is not able to kill Sakumo, who did not help him, but kills his allies in droves. Decide already
You're so "smart." He snatched me with one picture. The hero of this story is a dumb patient, how do canon characters differ from supporting characters? Nothing, but the protagonist does not kill them, although they killed a bunch of his people. He's just a coward.
I have a bunch of questions. What was the point of putting him in a non-Konoha if he hardly kills canon characters? The author is just a coward who is afraid of incomprehensible things.
Commentary not on this chapter, but on the work as a whole. Why is Jirai's character so different in different fanfics? Here I personally want to dismember him and feed him his own organs. The most annoying character
Even I can last 50 seconds without oxygen. And the monsters of that world can't? Some kind of nonsense
I'd like to see this as a separate job (or a job where the protagonist gets the power of Law).
How an alcoholic's T-shirt turned into a T-shirt without an arm? Я требую объяснений
I have not yet seen the two universes on the table. How can you screw up by connecting the Tokyo ghoul and the demon slayer? The hero changes his behavior 180 degrees stupidly because of one phrase about a pig. This is as stupid as possible and the author apparently could not think of anything more interesting and this pig will be mentioned even later.