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How many more times are you gonna say 'Who takes revenge this way?' in this chapter, I wonder?
You literally said this exact thing but in a different way 2 lines ago.
See... like this. This same thing has been said multiple times in multiple chapters. Seems like a means to give content without having to think up new things. Sorry if my comment offends some. But imo is shows you're just throwing words out to hit the character limit of the chapters...
I like the story so far but it def seems like there is a lot of repeating the same few bits of information over and over in different kinds of ways that's starting to bug me. I don't like drawn out chapters with things repeated more than once.
Another instance where the story plot was rushed along and we were left struggling to keep up.
I don't understand these series of events at all. This Pluto is supposedly stronger than void beasts, and yet Leo is toying with him. It makes no sense. Leo is in a place with powers beyond his imagination and yet he is doing all this like it's nothing. What happened to this being some super secret powerful ancient zone if Leo can do what he wants with impunity?
Keeps feeling like all this is being rushed along. Leo is a lot more level headed, and smarter than what he is being portrayed as right now. The Ancestor alone crushed how many planets? He should be a lot more calm in this situation trying to figure things out, not attacking beings supposedly out if his league.