nervousdragon
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nervousdragon2yrCommentedI think this is supposed to be nice?
She smiled and nodded. "It's not to meet you, Lady Avery."- nervousdragon3yrCommented
*were fighting
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much perplexed doesn't work grammatically it would be better just to say perplexed and even then conflicted might be a better word.
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*hissed I think? I'm not too sure about that one
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*chosen
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Flower
Then there was the Floer Knight, as carefree as ever as she seemed to be playing some knives thriving game with a pair of Harlequins. The rules seemed to indicate that whoever managed to score a hit on the other first won, the trio now locked in a fierce bladed battle. Naturally, the Flower Knight emerged unscathed. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
in this situation passed should be past.
"This is the business of the Inquisition, your men are best spent serving here. I and my Elites will take care of this matter," descending passed disappointed members of this garrison, Jack rejoined his own forces. A hundred members of the Nameless Legion's Anti-demon division, twenty priests of the Red Cloth, and a woman beneath an enormous mound of dark fibre. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
enough that he could and I don't really understand the sentence about asking.
"Apologies, that was unprofessional," Jack muttered and restrained the burning power within that filled him with strength beyond gods. This was real power, enough he could shatter that golem with his fist if fully unleashed, that could see him asking, that could- Jack breathed in, and out. Slower. Allowing the thoughts to wash through him and somewhere else. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
but real demons
"They tried Templar, but we pushed them back. Cleaned up the demon's corpses, and piled 'em up in the warehouse. None of the usual Ruin Rippers, Snipclaws or Sandrakes though, but real demon. They were organised, Lord Templar, bloody fierce too." The Captain continued to salute where he stood, armour slightly dented along with his mithril shoulder plate but otherwise in great condition. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
fool should probably be fools
The endless wars brought slaves to fuel the fires of industry, and refugees that settled in the cities outer districts or the slums outside the walls, while the harbour brought in merchants from sea and land. But it was Oldeth's attractions that suckered in the nobles, the off duty knights, the returning soldiers, and the fool with too heavy a purse. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
too should probably be replaced with also
The second-largest city in the world (according to Alandrian scholars) had grown rich in sea trade for several centuries. Their people were kept busy with the practices of wealth, but too dabbled in the odd conquest of neighbouring lands. Their endless profits trickling down to form armies and warships that supported war all throughout the world. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
*you
"Your need a Soul Anchor. Easy to make, and I know just where to find them," the Imp grinned. "But I would have to be freed to do that for you...so what's say we help each other out?" - nervousdragon3yrCommented
*he's too old
"His too olf for you," Rams said flatly. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
friend not frient
"When we're done being healed we'll go to the shattered throne again, I think that's where Bazza has been too. Chatting with the boss there like an old frient." - nervousdragon3yrCommented
them shoud be then
"We'll get you checked them. Taki can you do anything for curses?" - nervousdragon3yrCommented
heart should be hurt and it should be scorched
"Ellie, practically no one but you is heart," Taki said curtly, and began using his druidic power to rejuvenated her scorches body, "you're lucky no lasting damage will come from this. What you did was reckless and you know it." - nervousdragon3yrCommented
No period after something and the i should be capitalized.
"You can speak your mind, boy, in but a short time. Until then, there is something. i most show you. A dark secret as to our reality, and the ONLY hope humanity has at salvation," with a wave of his hand the room began to hum, and Jack felt near weightless. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
hive should be give
"Grand Guildmaster Kenji, could you hive us a hand?" Ellie said as she decapitated a pair of wide-eyed gnomes, who had started to chatter in their grating tones. - nervousdragon3yrCommented
*you're
"Ellie, your late if we're training today!" hissed Scales as Ellie entered the Golden Goose Guildhall. The snake woman spent her time here now, as did most of the Headless Hunter Guildmembers due to some buddy-buddy relationship between their Guildmasters.