My point was mainly that it is a very easy theory to disprove, but to clarify, pure water is completely harmless.

Author-san, will you be making a discord server for the novel?

yet....

Author-san, I am slightly confused by the interplay between Rank and Class. Does Rank always trump Class or does a certain difference in Class overcome rank. For instance, is an Awakened Titan weaker or stronger than a Fallen Beast.

I am in agreement. This is some proper foreshadowing.

In all fairness, you didn't really make it very clear what you meant. It would be better to say something like "Although the writing was too small for him to discern, for some reason he was still able to read the names regardless."

Drinking game: take a shot every time Panda shifts blame to someone else

We should publicize his dark past to the world.

This is just blatantly false. You can go out and buy pure, distilled water very easily. I am not sure exactly where on Earth you got an idea like this.

I hate to break this to you, but people curse when they get hurt lol

I use apostrophes e.g. "What the heck" is out loud and 'What the heck' is an internal thought. There are other methods though.

Pretty good so far. To be honest I would give this a perfect score if I were comparing it only to other Webnovels however I think it has the potential to stand as an actual book, and it that regard there are definite criticisms. That being said, this is only the beginning and the author is definitely improving so who knows what the future holds.

This is an internal thought of the character. It should be indicated by some kind of quotation mark or italics (whichever you prefer)

Why did you switch to second person here? Generally speaking, perspective switches are only for large chunks of text that need to be in a different POV. Otherwise, you should stick to 1 all the time.

Is darkroom a compound noun here i.e. the room where you hang pictures to develop. If not, there needs to be a space.

there needs to be a comma after "after all" but you legitimately said in your earlier comment that commands could be followed by commas.....

Will fix the typo but as for indentation all of this is copy pasted from a google doc and from comparison I could tell it changed some stuff. Normally I don't indent at all as I find it rather annoying

kk. Second example is correct. The first is a bit iffy. More up to preference as "Wake up sweetheart" is a full sentence and it being its own sentence denotes that there is something of a pause in between the two sentences. A comma or semicolon might be acceptable as well tho

Hi, Author here. I have tried to make a proper fantasy book, somewhat in the vein of modern epic fantasy like Brandon Sanderson and Patrick Rothfuss. I obviously am still a long way off from those authors but I would like to think I am getting better and better over time. If you want a book that is focused more on character and world building as well as a slow rise to action and adventure then I think you could really get something out of this. In addition, my grammar and English are both very nearly flawless, especially after several rounds of editing to catch small errors so if you are looking for a book that isn't chock full of grammatical errors, you may have found it.

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