JewelQueen_001

This is one of the few Manga I read to the end, it is just a great story. Thank you to all who had a part in it!

I really like this Major Payne character:)

Wasn't he just laying on the sofa a couple sentences ago?....now he's standing?

famous last words...

I agree. If anything, it should cost a bit of stamina at most

Positive: 1. Love Rewind/Reincarnation plots, this one has a system plot added which I also like. 2. Chapters are not 3 pages, so I get more and who doesn't love more? 3. MC isn't a pushover or total jerk. He's courageous, smart, team player, and family man. Negative: 1. You don't know where the MC is located in the world, until many chapters in, which is confusing. The world building is practically non-existent. All you know is that humanity is being invaded, it adds mystery sure. But the intro to a plot needs to be captivating, not generic and vague. Coming into a genre that is heavily competitive, this intro had very little NEW. 2. The intro had too many plot holes, I want to ask this: If you watched the world destroyed and had the chance to go back in time to save your loved ones...would you use the little time you had to go to college? delegate preparations with little hands on? tell your friend and a technical stranger before your 'beloved parents,' what's going on? sleep?(that last one is based on realistic PTSD, anyone who has seen real death much less millions die in front of them would not sleep well) 3. The swearing is too much. Every other word out of anyone's mouth is the F word. As a reader, I see swear words as filler words such as 'like,' 'um,' 'uh.' Your word count is amazing, but I feel cheated. Again, this is a readers viewpoint. Most people who swear this much in a novel, are writing how they speak. But it really detracts from the plot. Granted some situations could realistically need a swear word, just not that much.

aka: Goku

oh, I must be old, I first thought of Kakarot

you mean timeline?

Amen, glad someone said it!