I agree. One of the negatives points of this fanfic is that you often see moments where Ken is berating other characters just so that he could have his moment of moral superiority or something. Honestly, from what I have seen of mr Pink, I'm pretty sure he wouldn't have reacted like that, I also think that a lot of charcters are badly portrayed in this fic, Sengoku being one of them by the way.

Again, I think you are mixing up Sasaki and Queen, Sasaki is a fishmen, Queen is a cyborg

Sasaki ain't a cyborg though...

Tell this to Kishimoto, he is the one who wrote Naruto

No he can't, Obito has to become tangible to take someone into the Kamui dimension, meaning that if Ken tries to do so, Sengoku would then be able to strike him.

The writing isn't bad, it's the style you chose that reduces the quality a little (Im' the one who wrote the earlier comment, just answering with another account). I get it that writing multiple stories at the same time makes it difficult for you to write all of them in detail, it's hard for you to write, which can give the impression that you are rushing things and not creating enough build up. Using chat gpt and writing key moments of build up could be a good thing for your book. By the way, it has nothing to do with the subject, but I would like to thank you man, you are the reason I started writing fanfics, your Marvel novel really gave me the courage to start my own fanfics. Although I dropped my first novel because I wasn't happy with what I wrote, the ones that I am preparing right now are way better, so thank you for writing your stories.

I'm afraid I have to disagree with those who are saying that only having OC would dull the story. It is hard to write a fanfic about Overlord because there isn't enough material to write a substantial story about it. If the MC joins Ainz, then there is basically nobody who can oppose them (don't talk about the Dragon Lords, they ain't enough to make a worthwhile opposition), all the strong characters are on one side, so what is the author supposed to write about? MC bullying weaklings? Satisfying but it will get boring very quickly. On the other hand, if the author introduces a new group into the mix, a new power structure will appear, new scenarios can be created, new situations, abilities, and relationship dynamics can appear, and the story will become richer. Plus, I'm interested to see what the MC's organization will look like. What are the members going to be? Will they oppose Nazarick? How will that organization work? What will their personalities be? Sorry but as a writer myself, I just can't see a lot to write about for this fanfic if the MC simply follows Momonga, I personally think that the story would quickly lose steam, the best route this fanfic can take is to expand on the Overlord world and create new dynamics that can make the story interesting and give the MC something to look out for (and I mean real things to look out for, not just catching girls like pokemons).

Honestly, I'm always against the idea of bringing modern technology to foreign worlds, I think it takes away the uniqueness of the said world

human duck?

Just don't make him forget all his character development please, as much as there are lunatics here who want to see him suffer left and right, that would not be logical for him to start from the beginning on that aspect.

I still don't understand why Luffy didn't simply smash Crocodile with all his water jutsus... I mean, why spray yourself with water just to punch someone when you can directly spray your enemy?

This doesn't make sense, he wasn't even in the navy at that time, he and Fujitora got recruited after the two years time skip via the world's military conscription

There is a big problem though, if I remember correctly, Momo needs to understand the atomic configuration of an object in order to reproduce it, so Vivi will basically be limited to what Momo can do since she has her memories too. On that note, she will need to find an intelligent person to use her quirk in the best possible way, if she meets Vegapunk, she will even be able to create devil fruits!

Ain't that Shisui?

Punk Hazard isn't really a frozen Island though, it's only because of Aokiji that it is like that so I don't know if it is a good example

LEZDUIT !!!!!!!!

Honestly, I don't think Hawks would react like that, he is someone capable of being rational no matter the situation.

1 year in the real world means 7 years in the Dream World. Seven years is clearly long enough when you know that Luffy reached his current level of haki mastery in less than five years and that he dreamed himself being talented in every subject in the Dream World.

That's because one type of energy equals an entire power system. You have to look at it like the MHA world is its own world. Be it Nen, Chackra, Curse Energy, etc, all of those do not exist in the MHA, so if Dante uses his powers to create new types of energy, it would be the same as him introducing a new concept to the MHA world, and that would be extremely expensive in terms of energy. By using stamina as the cost, Dante is using something that already exists, plus, stamina is something easier to develop than any form of energy, so he is in fact saving dream energy by using stamina as the "currency".