TheOrigination
When things go south, it's okay to run away.
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TheOrigination6dCommentedYou mean, "Yu nodded her *head*." ?
"I get it." Yu nodded her nod, agreeing with him for once, "I remember killing someone who tried to get handsy in a forest."- TheOrigination1mthCommented
Hey, even though I'm this late, I still want to ask, Is there by any chance you continue this story, even though you haven't update it for 3 years, and I also check your account that you haven't came back online for a year. Well, that's all I want to ask. Thank you for the story as well.
Ch 7 What's a childhood without a crush? - TheOrigination3mthCommented
Did you mean Principal, or in this story Theresa is a Overseer?
Beside me, Overseer Theresa lay sleeping, her serene expression softened by the gentle light filtering through the window. - TheOrigination3mthCommented
Not principal?
"Major Himeko, Overseer Theresa is waiting for you," Mei informed Himeko, approaching her. - TheOrigination3mthCommented
Well, this answer my last question from couple of the last chapter.
"Ohh! Mei-senpai? She is also out on a mission." - TheOrigination3mthReplied to Yamiru
I'm sorry, but what do you mean by that? Even though this chapter or the before this chapter is about Bronya, she still need to be include about it. For example, when Shin went to class and all the girl are talking about him, where is Mei? We see Kiana having conversation with Shin, but we hadn't see Mei.
Woah, good progress from the idiot. I bet Mei-senpai will be praising her a lot. - TheOrigination3mthCommented
This is the same as well.
"AHHH!! I remember now! I see!" Kiana halted Himeko immediately. - TheOrigination3mthCommented
Umm...I don't think you need the word "I see".
Himeko sighed, "Look, Kiana, It's been a while since you asked that so how about I tell you WHY you haven't gone up to S rank yet... i see, Let's start from the mischief you did-" - TheOrigination3mthCommented
Where is Mei? She hadn't appeared since chapter 28.
Woah, good progress from the idiot. I bet Mei-senpai will be praising her a lot. - TheOrigination3mthCommented
*rode back
With that, we continued our meal, savoring each moment of our time together, and as our meal finished, we left the restaurant and ode back to St. Freya, the cool night air brushing against our skin as Bronya's Project: Bunny propelled us forward with its characteristic speed. - TheOrigination3mthReplied to TheOrigination
You Also need to fix the "her tone playfuly"
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Did you mean Bronya?
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You forgot the "J" for "Just"😅.
ust then, a love letter gracefully landed on my desk, drawing the attention of Wendy, Kiana, and Bronya. I picked it up, curious about its contents. "Hm?" I opened the love letter and began to read, with my friends eagerly looking over my shoulder. - TheOrigination3mthCommented
I guess this asnwer my previous comment question😅.
[2] Houkai Welt (HW) is an unit of measurement in the game's lore which measures Houkai Energy output from Houkai Beasts or Catastrophes. When an ordinary human is exposed to 10 HW or larger, their bodily functions slowly cease and their body gets corrupted into a zombie of sorts. - TheOrigination3mthCommented
*her*? Isn't it supposed to be *him*? Since she talking about Shin.
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What is the [2]?
"You... What's your HW[2]!?" She muttered something, "Even the Herrscher of the Void's HW is 4458... yet you?!" - TheOrigination3mthReplied to Helia_King
Is that so? Well, if that's the case I guess the chase part was correct.
Clara eventually shook her head to chase this thought away and followed Svarog who created a safe path for her to walk in. - TheOrigination3mthReplied to ShinySpiritomb
I'm pretty sure the person that tried to kill Yuuto wasn't Bronya, but a man.
And following right behind him was a woman who had gray hair and matching colored eyes. Her face was serious but a hint of confusion, gloom and doubt was evidently growing with each step she made. - TheOrigination3mthReplied to TheOrigination
or you could *erase*
Clara eventually shook her head to chase this thought away and followed Svarog who created a safe path for her to walk in. - TheOrigination3mthCommented
*change*
Clara eventually shook her head to chase this thought away and followed Svarog who created a safe path for her to walk in.