chaosflame
An idiot with a reading addiction... that's all... THAT is my character development
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chaosflame8mthPostedI suppose I'll start from the top and work my way down. So to begin, the writing quality is phenomenal in practically every aspect, very few or no spelling errors each chapter, the grammar is clean enough to read with little to no effort needed to understand the meaning and your dialog is well written, my only issue in that area is that Gaia needs something to distinguish that she's talking. The story is developing well and the premises you've started have promise. The character design is immaculate, each character feels real and has their own personality. The update stability is great, a chapter every other day keeps the readers interested but keeps the story suspenseful. Last but not least, the world background, while not original, seems like it will have a bit of a fresh twist to it. To finish this off I would also like to say that I thoroughly enjoy your form of writing!
This book has been deleted.- chaosflame1yrReplied to Foosh
I'd like to remind you he's 11
This book has been deleted. - chaosflame2yrReplied to noobat_games
...anyone else reading these two's conversation like nail talking to piccolo in dbz abridged?
"Yardrat is good and all, but it comes with many problems that could be life threaten later." There were 2 problems when visiting yardrat. The first was the legendary heart disease that took Goku out in another timeline. - chaosflame3yrCommented
doesn't he know he's the protagonist?
'So they did die' Ryo thought as he resumed his fight with the Licker, which was turning more and more complicated by the second. Exasperated by the scene, he yelled out his frustration. "For fucks sake! Why the fuck can't we just walk peacefully through anywhere?!" - chaosflame3yrReplied to WolfStar14
the answer is never
S & M (R-18) - chaosflame3yrReplied to Milkyone
this was so true milkyone had to say it 3 timesđ
"We can't forsake the two hundred ninjas who were sent to Nagori Isles to be purged either. It would create unrest among our shinobi populace since the event of this victory is too good to not be spread among our ninjas in order to boost morale. We really can't afford to have our ninja question if they are going to be sent on a suicide mission next. In small and unnoticeable doses, it is fine but right now⊠We will have to actually open the Kumo front or prepare for discontent. During the war, that could prove fatal." Himeno shook her head in exasperation at just how many angles the report covered. She highly doubted Rei did that deliberately. - chaosflame3yrReplied to GrunkDunce
calm yourself, he's not worth the effort.
Spirit: Fifth-Grade Magician (2,014/2,000)