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Manuel_0219

Manuel_0219

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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02198mth
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    I really start to get the feeling his reincarnation was a time travel into the long forgotten past or something

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  • Manuel_0219
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    Ngl, the idea of portraying Arthur from other peoples POV is genius

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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02198mth
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    für Fortnite

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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02198mth
    Replied to READER_10

    the good ending

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  • Manuel_0219
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    Not exactly the Elijah I knew, but definitely one I'll like

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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02198mth
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    I've watched enough Railgun to see what absolute power does to a man

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  • Manuel_0219
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    Dieser Kommentarbereich ist nun Eigentum der BRD.

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  • Manuel_0219
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    Giving the Challenger the right of the first move might just be the stupidest thing I've heard of, and I love that"Either you run away, letting everyone know you're weak, or you're letting yourself get impaled by the earthen spike I've prepared underneath your feet while we spoke"

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  • Manuel_0219
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    Replied to Braunbaer

    He just built different

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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
    Commented

    Das könnten actually interessant werden. Jedoch solltest du ein wenig auf die Grammatik und so achten

    Ch 1 Licht?
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
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    Du hast die Groß- und Kleinschreibung verbessert, das gefällt mir. Aber die langen Sätze wirken noch etwas unbeholfen. Ganz so, als würdest du sie nur in die Länge ziehen, damit sie lang sind. Musst du etwas kompensieren? Frage bloß aus Interesse.

    Ch 2 Kapitel 1: Der Anfang des Drachen 1
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    Das Land
    Realistic · Dragon_gamer_7190
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
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    p.s. Bisher muss ich aber sagen, dass mir die Aufmachung des Prologes zusagt. Ich weiß aber noch nicht, ob es Comedy ist oder nicht.

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    Das Land
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
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    Da nur ein Prolog vorhanden ist, kann ich nur 3 Sterne vergeben. Aber du solltest darauf achten, welche Worte groß und welche Worte klein geschrieben werden. das wirkt einfach besser. Oder willst du wie der Autor eines Buches, dass ich gerade lese, werden, über dessen Story sich die Leute bereits in Chapter 1 lustig machen, weil ganze Satzabschnitte fehlen?

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    Das Land
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
    Replied to Manuel_0219

    Proceeds to vertipp mich

    Ch 1 Prolog
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    Das Land
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
    Commented

    Also bisher gefällt es mir ganz gut, aber su solltest dringend beachten, dass nur Nomen, Namen und Satzanfänge groß geschrieben werden. Keine Verben. Oder Adjektive.

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    Das Land
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
    Commented

    this is honestly making me aggressive... this book creates the urge to write a story myself, but since my creativity is almost as bullshit as this authors pure writing skills, it would suck big time

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    My Magical System
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
    Commented

    in wich one exactly? there are multiple ones. around 10 or something

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    My Magical System
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
    Commented

    yep. seems like the corpse is dead

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    My Magical System
    Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
    Commented

    since I don't know the word for that, I just say it in German Haarspalterei

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    My Magical System
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  • Manuel_0219
    Manuel_02192yr
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    ey man, don't wake me up

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    My Magical System
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