Author , you should probably remove the one part of the chapter that was repeated.

Good God! Sounds like my home town, minus the cool abandoned building.

Something in this speaks to the 5-year-old girl I once was; the one who watched 'The Nightmare Before Christmas ' once a day, every day.

This is really hard for me to read. It stirs up emotions and pokes at sore spots not fully healed .

I read the first chapter. The concepts behind the book are interesting. It is refreshing to see the male lead is an older guy. I also like the authors' style of writing.

I just read the first 3 chapters (and am part of the way through the fourth), the emotions I can relate to this novel! The betrayal is something you can almost physically feel yourself. Well done!

I have only read the first chapter so far. I find the story line very interesting! I hope the author continues adding new chapters. I look forward to seeing the completed book one day in the future.

Out of all your novels I have read so far. I truly believe that this one has the best writing. (I mean that not overall, but from the very first chapter.) Out of all the first chapters you have written, this one is the best. Glad to see your writing so strong, straight out of the starting gate! Very impressive! Well done, my friend.

I am intrigued about what will happen. Your writing makes me feel empathy for the main character. It reminds me of the old saying 'being in the wrong place at the wrong time'. (describing an unavoidable run of bad luck). I hope the character's luck has a turn for the better.

I love the idea of having an informative section before the story begins, to give readers an overview and some background information. It prevents the reader from stuggling with concepts later on when reading.

Are the Preys- hybrids like plants in real life, with the whole reproduction of DNA process? A single seed planted in the Earth, germinates, and grows a sprout and roots, before emerging from the earth?

ok...I love the fact that the enemies of the Prays are like a double edged sword. Giving them very negative purposes (or characteristics) as well as very positive purposes (or characteristics), creates two things here. 1, it gives the types of enemies more depth and 2 displays the enormity of how important the Prays are.

I would change 'degenerative genetic alteration' to "degenerative genetic breakdown" or "degenerative genetic damage". The first sounds (to me ) like the DNA of cells is mutating/ evolving, while the second two imply more the idea of destruction or disease of the cells.

My way is yoga, meditation and a love of different foods from around the globe.

This novel is good so far. The only thing holding the author back is English grammar/ writing conventions/ English translation. A bit of improvement in these areas and the author has a killer novel on their hands!

The first chapter has good potential. I like the plot so far. The author could improve the work further by learning more about grammer rules and making it clearer when it is Aurora thinking or speaking ( vs. when it is Lana thinking or speaking). Good luck, author!

They seem like a race that would enjoy the slow-paced life of peace, but are destined not to have it. I like the set up for a race perfectly capable of kicking butt when the occasion calls for it in a cool, calculated manner!

Yes. I have not officially in my written chapters said the location is Canada, but I am working it into chapter 9

I have only read the first chapter so far, but it is definitely a novel to keep your eyes on! As the chapters get published, I am feeling eager to see where the story line goes. I hope the author keeps up the good work!

This chapter has a very intriguing plot. Not to mention I love the art on the book cover. The chapter ignites in the reader the need to read more. I want to know what happens next!