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its perfect 5 by me.

well buddy i would really recommend u start those side chps and shinden novels as it improves a persons understanding of even side characters. its 4.6 from me here. will give it more as i know u must have plans for side characters ahead then just not now. hope u dont feel bad.

ill give a 5.0 as u are one of those authors who take the story to unexplored places of plot and its holes. eg the ruins of otutsukis and all

authour get a charizard here. it will fun to watch urs against alains.

obvio he was wronged bro as thats the reason naruto helped tailbeasts

good job using gato for money.

thanks buddy and thanks for chp as well.

buddy please make sure the side characters get some real development for example if madara dies in your story u can give his each rinnegan to itachi and shisui.or even let sage of six paths give it to them directly. as for in databooks its stated that itachi has large chakra but less reserves the problem can be done with sage mode as chakra mingles with nature to form greater chakra. he will be a beast also if u let him study fuinjutsu i have feeling that u know totsuka blade was extra addition according to orochimaru so itachi might know sealing jutsu just my opinion though. as for shisui is also a beast. and keep kakashi with dms and six paths as well. he will still be strong without the rinnegan.

buddy please focus on side characters as well give them some unique technique like kishimoto did. for eg pass madara rinnegan to both itachi and shisui and let kakashi have his dms with thesix paths.

if koto is in the game then its bye bye minato.

the story is a lot better than expected if we avoid the mistakes at the first as you were a begining author the story is a lot good. the mc has a sin seal that seems nerf but can make him op as well. lastly love the way u include new things in the chap. unlike just following plot

well thats the peoblem bro. the electro magnet rease is corroding his arm along with the chakra system.think if we were healing it then it will corrode again heal corrode. if we wanna stop it once and for all we need to do something else. As for killing the baby i guess he did it so izuna could have a deep hatred to otutsuki clan. As for the matter of fact i wont complain as the backstory to hate them was needed.And then about the nerf i mean there are a lot of things remaing for izuna.i mean the way he is strong now he can indees take on madara unless the six paths one. So author did a good job creating a scene where he has no nerf but still corrosion and needs to heal

Naa mc cant heal constantly corroding damage or else he will be healing all his life as long as he has electromagnet release his chakra system kerps corroding

no actually suna attacked firat so this ais just a payback as for a matter no other villages will attack her becuse kirigakure is with konoho and if suna needs to survive they need to be with konoha as well. So no matter what other hidden village means kumogakure and hidden stone village do at the point they cant point a fault in it or fight three combined village together

yeah thst ok because jigen didnt stab her

why not madara give his rinnegan to both itachi and shisui before one each.this will significantly help them to fight against otutsukis

i mean we dont know much about karma still now why would authour put it in ayaka .We cant tell karma seal goes according to method by amado because in timeskip kawaki has karma again

his favourite character might be light yagami