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Errass1yrPostedStolen. Original: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13556982/1/The-Age-of-Men The author said, he will start cross-posting on webnovel btw. .....
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Hogwarts is in Scotland, not Ireland.
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was laying to everybody --> lying :)
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I don't get it. Wasn't it the whole point that wizards know about his name, so that he can make fun of them? Why fight for the name at all, if you are not going to use it.
After thinking about it a little he accepted. (Such a shame. All of those wasted puns. I want to cry.) He knew that he can avoid a lot of problems by doing this. (And here it is again choosing easy path as soon as i got the chance... But my main goal is still active.) Some of his plans changed at this very moment. Unknown to everybody this one decision changed the fate of a lot of people. "Thank you for your care prof. McGonagall, i accept." She almost jumped at this. They had little hope of him accepting. - Errass2yrCommented
Before it was CP-16
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,* where the shooting
After deboarding from the airport, Will found Jeffrey outside the airport, where he had rented a bus so that the whole crew could go together at once to the location where the shooting would take place - just outside a town called Burkittsville, formerly Blair. - Errass2yrCommented
, and while he liked her a lot, he couldn't...* or , and even though he liked her a lot, he couldn't...*
Recently, she has been giving clear signals, and even he liked her a lot, but he can't just go ahead and get caught up in a relationship at such a crucial point in his career. - Errass2yrReplied to Great_Young_Master
Will and gonna are 2 future tenses. In english, you can only use one. Going to (gonna) is the tense, I believe should be used.
Not a classic but something that will surely gonna give the viewers chills. - Errass2yrReplied to TheOmniAdviser
Well, I guess it's alright then. It's just that I've never done it, nor have I heard someone do it.
"Oh, it's fine if you're not free. Maybe another time. By the way, if you want to meet Uncle Charles, I could set up a meeting for you." - Errass2yrPosted
As far as grammar goes, there are a few mistakes, but in comparison to other stories on this site, it is stellar and doesn't hinder in anyway while reading. Autor is currenty uploading several chapters a day, so I can't really complain about that. Story is progressing nicely. Not too fast, not too slow. I am a bit conserned that the autor may try to 'make' every big movie there is, as there is not enough time to do so. But as of now, this isn't a problem and the author may already have a plan for that. As for the character desingn and the world beckgroung, I have no problems. The MC does have a personality and the world of is pretty well reaserched. (As far as I know) Overall, it reads very nicely and I am excitedly waiting for more chapters.
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Contact previously saved as ´Uncle Benjamin´.
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I wouldn't use the word look twice in a sentence. Maybe use was instead of looked, or handsome instead of good looking.
He had a haircut, with his hair being quiff cut. He looked quite good looking because of his well-maintained body and fitting clothes. - Errass2yrCommented
Will and gonna, 2 future tenses. I would choose going to/gonna.
Not a classic but something that will surely gonna give the viewers chills. - Errass2yrCommented
in front of her*
Benjamin wouldn't allow any random youngster in his office, so the man in front of him must have some talent. - Errass2yrCommented
Again, not sure, if calling an uncle by last name is a thing that is done.
"Oh, it's fine if you're not free. Maybe another time. By the way, if you want to meet Uncle Charles, I could set up a meeting for you." - Errass2yrCommented
Shouldn't it be uncle Benjamin? Seems a bit wierd calling your uncle by his last name.
"Don't worry Uncle Charles, I'm not going to spend all the money I get from the script on a fool's errand. I would make sure to use it wisely. Just trust me on this one." - Errass2yrCommented
that were* going to release
After that, many studios were trying to emulate it's success and Benjamin was hearing a lot about new movies based on this concept that was going to release in the next one or two years.