Entering ancient caves? Yeah nothing bad will happen because of that
The military tried to break down the strange cave several times by launching various types of missiles and nuclear weapons, but they couldn't put a scratch on it, and the water was also left unscathed by the barrage of attacks on the cave.
I mean. . . You can't really look behind you either
Nikolai has never been fond of darkness. He's sure no one is. It's terrifying knowing that someone could be behind you and you wouldn't see because of the dark. He feels a blow of cold air to his neck and he shudders.
So far it's better than the original, with the opening being slow but quick. As you read you can see into the characters (Just a little at current state). some punctuation problems. but do far so good
One. Yes this is pretty good so far
Two. Why were you gonna kill our boy?
Three. Torturing Niko seems pretty good if he's going to be a king with his current body and how most people seem him
One. Yes this is pretty good so far
Two. Why were you gonna kill our boy?
Three. Torturing Niko seems pretty good if he's going to be a king with his current body and how most people seem him
He was a dark-skinned man with white dreads that had golden ornaments and glorious light yellow eyes. He had a very chiseled face. In Nikolai's eyes, the man was the most majestic man he laid his eye on. He was seriously gorgeous.
Your story is thought out and clear. No problems on this end main protag has a good amount of depth for how long we've met them. The story has questions that have been answered while leaving room for theories. Not a lot about backgrounds but this is still very young. Over all 4.5/ out of five