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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong1d
    Commented

    Сасаки кодзиро нервно курит в сторонке

    Ch 41 Chapter 41
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    Naruto: Monthly Refreshing Passive System
    Anime & Comics · Zaelum
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong3d
    Commented

    Brеton knights look at Ravin after sparring

    Ch 223 Chapter XXVII: Knights of Evermor
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
    Video Games · Rastislav
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong6d
    Posted

    I don’t feel the integrity of your story, each chapter looks torn and disconnected from the previous one. correct this shortcoming and send him on a long quest, otherwise superficial periodic skirmishes with local bigwigs do not cause a wow effect. and I like that you don’t push your character to the forefront of the whole world by making him non-violent and popular from the very beginning. Я исправлю обзор когда почувствую улучшения

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    Marvel-Comics: The Weaver
    Anime & Comics · Bulale_Abali
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong9d
    Commented

    she returned to town and they were all dead

    Ch 32 31: Ciri's Tale
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    Gotham's Dead End Bar
    Anime & Comics · Daddy
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong13d
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    Ch 217 Chapter XXI: Home Sweet Home
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
    Video Games · Rastislav
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong15d
    Commented
    Ch 215 Chapter XIX: Fall of Falkreath (Part 1)
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
    Video Games · Rastislav
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong17d
    Posted

    I quickly sat down and started writing fanfic.I quickly sat down and started writing fanfic.I quickly sat down and started writing fanfic.I quickly sat down and started writing fanfic

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    DxD: Holier Than Thou
    Anime & Comics · charreos
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong18d
    Commented

    This time travel thing never works well. Are you having trouble coming up with a plot?

    Ch 25 Chapter 24
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    Marvel Mutant, I’m a Burning Martian!
    Anime & Comics · EgyptianDio
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong20d
    Commented

    scorch be like:

    Ch 212 Chapter XVI: Trust
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
    Video Games · Rastislav
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong21d
    Commented

    Reivin: oh Magnus

    Ch 211 Chapter XV: Battling the Shatter-shield
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong22d
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    Ch 210 Chapter XIV: The Nick of Time
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
    Video Games · Rastislav
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong27d
    Commented
    Ch 207 Chapter XI: Cleaning House
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
    Video Games · Rastislav
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong27d
    Commented
    Ch 207 Chapter XI: Cleaning House
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
    Video Games · Rastislav
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong1mth
    Posted

    this is good, but I would like it to be next to Messrs. Fewer excited women and please go deeper into the everyday genre. this is good, but I would like it to be next to Messrs. Fewer excited women and please go deeper into the everyday genre

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    Nuclear Winter
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong1mth
    Posted

    and so... 55 chapters later I can say for sure that combining the worlds of the Witcher and Skyrim was an unexpectedly good decision that gave us an atypical plot, which makes this fanfic quite cool. and now a huge BUT... your writing style is disgusting, maybe it’s because of the translator that I use for reading or something else, but the text is indistinct and rude, also there are too many rantings about the magical system of the world, even if I’m always for such in-depths, but I can’t say that I approve of something like this when most of what was written in the first act was not plot or interaction with other characters but dry theory

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    Skyrim x Witcher: Tale of Chronicle Explorers
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong1mth
    Commented

    vampires when Raven explained to them why vampires suck not only blood

    Ch 199 Chapter III: The Dawnguard
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong1mth
    Commented

    I want to believe that Raven will find the soul of his waifu in Cairo souls. but in reality it looks more like they will set him up with Serana’s mommy and the vampire girl herself

    Ch 197 Chapter I: Ripples
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    Skyrim: A Sorcerer's Tale
    Video Games · Rastislav
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong1mth
    Replied to SlowWittedSong

    I wrote through a translator so it turned out unclear, if you need an explanation, write

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    DxD: A Multiverse Chat Group
    Anime & Comics · OPELER
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong1mth
    Posted

    It seems to me that you poorly described the personality of GG, which is why the entire plot that you are building along with the dialogues seems wrong. I would suggest making something like a character sheet like in D&D to define clear boundaries for personalities and abilities. Also please note that you cannot make a character “good” if all of his qualities are positive, but give him flaws that will force him to struggle and grow. and about his chat in the multiverse. I liked that you chose non-epic characters for this (tsunade-kakashi, esdeath) but his interaction (current-future) seems a little strange because three of the group are characters whose dynamics are built on their relationships within them teams. and I would suggest adding more characters that are not in groups or are group leaders; it’s better to build relationships with them.

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    DxD: A Multiverse Chat Group
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  • SlowWittedSong
    SlowWittedSong1mth
    Commented

    The desire to get close to a woman in any way is very alarming

    Ch 5 Chapter 5: Crazy Guy
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    DxD: A Multiverse Chat Group
    Anime & Comics · OPELER
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