KingLettuce

The idea of the story is very intriguing but I think it needs to be fleshed out more. The pacing is very fast which is fine but some chapters feel like they skipped something or are out of order. There also is not much of an explanation/reason for things being the way they are like the mc’s mental issues. All things consider while the story needs a bit more work, it is a good read and I enjoyed it. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

So far the story is very interesting and different from the copy and paste Naruto stories out there. The translation is good and there are no issues to speak of so far. All in all a good read, keep up the good work Translator!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

First and foremost the story is pretty interesting, but it has a couple of things I consider issues. The main one is the repetitive use of the same descriptive language, it often feels like the same things are described the same way multiple times in the same chapter. The only time I’ve run into this is with stories written with the help of ai but in this case that could just be how it was written. Aside from that, the chapter lengths are very good and the story is moving at a decent speed pace. Keep up the good work ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

This is a good read overall and I have enjoyed what I’ve seen so far. The only complaint I have is there are not enough chapters released for me to read. The pacing is a little slow but for this story I don’t mind that. ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

This is one of the first Tokyo ghoul fanfics that I have read that isn’t immediately assaulting me with cringe and edginess. The story is actually interesting and seems to have a plot that can go somewhere unpredictable. The grammar is good and the length of the chapters are also good. Keep up the good work Translator!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

The translation itself is good, there are no issues with grammar that I noticed while reading it. The story itself is also entertaining to read and portrays characters or people from 40k pretty good. The chapter lengths are also good, overall nothing to complain about. Keep up the good work Translator!!!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

This really made me chuckle quite a few times, honestly this is peak writing. There is nothing to complain about at all, keep up the good work Author!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

I liked this a lot surprisingly, there is genuinely nothing to complain about in the story so far. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

Pretty decent, grammar is good and chapter length is also good. The portrayal of Price is also pretty good and it doesn’t feel out of character. I can’t wait to read more chapters, keep up the good work Author!!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………

This is a good concept and so far everything is moving in a good direction. Keep up the good work Author!!!!!! ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………………………… …………………………………………………………………………