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n this part, the System refers to itself as incapable of doing various things, which is not wrong. The one doing the majority of things so far is Arthur, who is managing and creating new things for the System that is incapable of doing most things on its own. Being an incomplete System, it doesn't even have minimal intelligence to "self-manage."
Ironically, this is a situation Arthur would love. Your comment has given me some possible ideas, so I appreciate it.
I will take your suggestion into consideration, thank you! I will see what I can do about the penalties in the upcoming chapters.
Ah, I see! Thank you for explaining and giving me that suggestion, I will take it into consideration when writing the future chapters.
So far, I don't have anyone in mind for his love interest. I've just decided that at some point in the story, there will be romance because I have a genuine desire to write something like that. I'm open to possible suggestions.
If I may ask, what do you mean by 'find a balance in your story'? I'm a bit lost about that part and I really didn't quite understand... but nonetheless, I appreciate your comment from the bottom of my heart.
I have some thoughts regarding the Gacha. I'm not against the idea of returning it to him as it was already part of some side plans, but it will likely take some time. After all, the Gacha system itself can already significantly enhance the character's strength at an extreme pace and that's not something I intend to do right now. Nevertheless, I will give your suggestion serious consideration.
The idea behind this class was supposed to be a Samurai, since the Warrior class already covers the other aspect of using more diversified swords. I believe I may have conveyed the wrong idea about this class considering the name I gave it.
I believe that so far the situation that happened with him rarely occurred with other System Users. I mean, yes, they all 'died' and received their Systems in different ways but most of them always followed a similar path until reaching the part of the System. And when it came to choices, there wasn't much diversity there considering that many works chose [Human], [Angel], [Vampire], and various other races. Now that I'm reading what I've posted I must admit that I included this sentence from Arthur too early considering it's the first official chapter.
I have some expectations for the writing in this work, as I have been greatly inspired by certain things in recent days. My primary language is definitely not the language used to write this work, so there may (and probably will) be errors in the writing, but I believe it is still readable to a certain extent. Some native words from where the story is set will not be translated, to make it simpler to understand and remember the setting of the story. If you have any questions about the work, feel free to ask in the chapter or in this message, and I should be able to respond as long as it's not something that will give away extreme spoilers about the future of the story.
( written in translator ) I don’t know how to feel about this prologue. I don’t think Gojo could beat Sukuna with full force while he was limited to 'not killing Sukuna' thanks to him being in Itadori’s body. Not even he should be able to kill Sukuna with all his might. ( Before anyone says that I am underestimating Gojo or overestimating Sukuna, it is necessary to remember that it is impossible to kill Sukuna. It took a stamp of 20 Fragments (his fingers) to 'defeat him', without counting entire generations of Jujutsu wizards. Unlike Sukuna, I don’t believe that Gojo has the capacity to fight an entire generation of Jujutsu Wizards, yet another one where there were probably dozens of people with absurd powers in the past, where Jujutsu was extremely active and important. ) This prologue gave me a negative opinion about the work, but I will continue reading to make sure that the work will be so forced or not.
Personally, considering the protagonist’s lack of maturity and his age, I don’t think his reaction would be just that. The protagonist didn’t go through so much to become so mature and have a 'surprise' reaction and just that. I feel like his reaction should be something else, like somehow he’s getting disappointed in his own strength or his little pride being extremely damaged. This could serve as a fuel for the protagonist to get even stronger and work even harder in training. But anyway, the reaction has already been made...
I really hope you haven’t seen any demons or gone through a similar situation. The spiritual pressure of something supernatural causes fear in any lower being alone, causing a kind of pressure. Not to mention the Hollow’s intent to kill. Soon, even if Tatsuki had all the willpower in the world, she would still feel fear.
So the torture will be carried out by the other Amazons without Hippolyta’s knowledge? I mean, wouldn’t it be weird if there were a lot of ignorant amazons and they think they’re doing the right thing by torturing him (after all, just the fact that they want to kill a newborn without considering all the cons already says that many of the amazons are not really smart when they want to)
I really hope the Protagonist doesn’t think about telling her or anyone else about the 'System' one day. That would be extremely disappointing.
Kyaaaaa Evangeline S2
He probably made that decision considering everything the owner of the game had presented to him. If he chose a demon, he could have an NPC that already started with 50 negative points, and those 50 additional negative points of the Race could prevent him from continuing in the game. ( Since the owner had told him that even the easiest mode of this game could be considered hard in other games, this is an extremely likely option )
Some theories have been thrown into the air now with what this chapter has presented, I’m curious about things now. A small question, author can you imagine any situation in the future that forces Karna to become the strongest version of him: 'God Karna'? ( I know that he cannot enter this form by wanting, and has dozens of requirements for it. That’s why I’m asking the question, I’m sincerely curious )
No