Dylan_Perkins

I say leave it how it is. Use this as a learning point to make your story better as you go on. I find this story very entertaining. Don't work too hard and burn yourself out on it. Trying to rewrite stuff.

I don't like this at all.😑

I don't know why but this was so funny to me. This whole chapter just had me chuckling. Take my power stones.

You said they were supposed to be 40 points.There is 39.

I think he means how fast his power grows like. There's a speed to it and Z broly's is just faster.

I Google it. it's the same word, it's just a different language.

Okay, when I read that I was not expecting, he was courting death at the end that was funny. Thank you.

I said I would make another review. After you hit 5 chapters you have and I gotta say I've enjoyed every single one I enjoy the character interaction. It's not too fast. It's not too slow. It is a very enjoyable, thank you.

If for some reason you need to power up your character, you can figure out a way to get 2 twice criticals. It was the name of the sacred gear that they thought the main character had at the beginning of the show. It could be useful if we had 2 of those. It doubles everything about the user once.

I got a question earlier in the chapter. When Jasper appeared, did he take his sacred gear? Or did he make a copy of it with his own eyes?