MiniBorkLazer

Yes

Whoops, responded with the wrong profile. For the time being, there isn't any romance planned. I may have it late in the story, but it won't be a harem.

Thanks for the review! I should mention chapter four introduces a rather significant change that may either hook readers further or turn them off to it.

The story is very well written so far. The first chapter hooks you and manages to keep you engaged. I can't speak for many aspects of a normal review, such as update stability and story development, since it is only six chapters in. But as long as it continues as it is, it will be a great story.

I think you may have accidently switched from first person to third person perspective. "My vision spun and my head pounded as I slowly regained awareness of his surroundings." his surroundings --> my surroundings*

My mistake

Noted. I did it intentionally, though.

'shocked glances' belongs in the previous paragraph

You didn't end the quotation.