TheUnknownAbyss

Not sure what made your writing pace seem draggy and hard to follow, you were routinely releasing 1 chapter a day at around the same time. Anyway, I’ll look forward to continuing to read this on RoyalRoad once it’s available on there.

So is he 16 or 19? At the beginning of Chapter 1 it says he is 19 but here it says he is 16.

Yes, I noticed with surnames for Holmes and Hudson, I simply thought that his first name Arthur was from the name of the author for Sherlock Holmes, Sir ARTHUR Conan Doyle. Only recently found this novel and started reading it. I’ve enjoyed what I’ve read so far. Looking forward to the other references I might find as I continue reading and how you use all the different mythologies which looks interesting so far based on the Quetzalcoatl quest you implemented mixed with 4 cardinal beasts.

Although his in-game name was Merlin, I thought Arthur was named after Sir Arthur Conan Doyle, the name of the author of Sherlock Holmes, sharing the name of the author and the character resulting in Arthur Holmes. His name being Arthur, the same as the author of Sherlock Holmes must be a great coincidence then that just happens to work perfectly.

Looks like Kimi might be about to have her first kill.

A suggestion for one of Toga’s games they could play could be dodgeball but using throwing knives instead of balls.

Yeah, I did try and think of some limitations on the ability to balance but it’s hard to do so without taking away its usefulness. Only thing I can think of now would be reducing the duration or forcefully ending the time stop under certain conditions e.g. interacting with living people unable to move could drastically shorten time stop duration or getting within a certain range of a living person breaks the person out of the stopped time with either time still stopped elsewhere but with them able to move or the stopped time is forcefully ended giving them a little time to react when they first snap out of being stopped in time. Not sure what to do about how to limit it for guns. I think I was much better in thinking up limitations to balance the potential development of the ability for both training and application of the ability to allow others she purposefully chooses to also move freely in the stopped time. I think at the end, while time stop would be helpful during combat making it seem to the target like she teleported in front of them in the middle of attacking while striking towards the target, it would be better as an escape tool allowing her and the others she chose to bring into the stopped time to escape stealthily. Also in terms of duration I was thinking of it initially only being active for a few seconds which could be trained to last up to a few minutes, under the assumption there is nothing which reduces the duration or ends the time stop.

Thoughts for third eye ability: It would be cool if the third eye when activated would allow Kimika to freeze time temporarily for short periods while allowing her to move around freely within the stopped time. Maybe this was already the plan for the ability. Once she has activated the eye ability for the first time, in addition to the obvious training of it to extend the possible duration she can stop/freeze time, she could potentially develop it even further to enable her to allow others she chooses to also move freely in the stopped time alongside her but with the cost of reducing the duration of the time stop when using this application with each additional person reducing time stop duration (although it should be extremely difficult to develop and train this application to increase the number of people even by 1 additional person other than herself).

Hopefully Toga will teach Kimika how to fight exceptionally well (even without Kimika using her quirk, although maybe not as good as Toga without Kimika’s quirk activated). Toga is probably one of the best combatants in the series especially considering that for a large time before her quirk evolved, her quirk only enabled her to shapeshift without enhancing her actual combat ability.

This chapter should be Chapter 57, after Chapter 56 Singled Out. Currently listed before Chapter 56 despite occurring afterwards.