good point. a correction has to be made.

let's be honest. Zandaya for best girl.

He will grow into his power.

moving too slow. you need to timeskip soon.

you should introduce alchemy. Say Adam has always been experimenting with a way to enhance blood and he figured it out. So, now they can make a variety of blood that tastes similar to humans. later on, you can make them find a unique mixture that mixes with his blood to create Nobles.

In about 3 more chapters.

In these recent chapters, the author has forgotten about Edward's day one friend, Jacob. Edward is always hanging out with the girls, giving this a twisted harem vibes. he should be hanging with Jacob and other guys. that's how the world works. No dude hangs out with girls all the time since, even if they are friends, something more will happen.

school started back up.

Pretty sure someone already translated this before. This is probably the third time I've seen this recycled.

Not a very important part of the story. But... hmmm. Jessica is a bit shallow so it works with her. As for Angela, she is a part of the story but she won't be around forever. Remember, this story is more than just Twilight.

Thanks. Had trouble with the fight scenes. Been working on it.

He will get stronger.

what about Aina?

Where is his father throughh all of this?

Why does everyone want to touch Tony's origin story? Let him have his origin story like usual.

legacies will be a part of this novel but not the originals or vampire diaries. though, the characters could me appearances if plot demands.

what are you going to do with this Irene character?

you tried to make him mysterious but failed spectacularly. that's good, now we know you're better at writing quirky characters.

an awesome start.

don't want to touch the originals nor the vampire diaries but Underworld, definitely.