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Chris_Ross_61861yrCommentedWhat? A few chapters ago, Lei Lou was removed and replaced with Mu Xiaoling so how is he back?
Facing Zhu Tian's provocation, Lei Luo was not afraid at all and even spoke back.- Chris_Ross_61861yrCommented
This makes even less sense. First Lin Feng was the first to make it to the top 100 in 100 years but now this #1 spot has only been there for 20 years? Inconsistent numbers here with time.
Lin Feng's eyes glinted. The one who was ranked first in the Virtual Battle Chamber and had dominated the first place for twenty years, referred to as the Demon King by the students of the Myriad Academy—Dongfang Sheng! - Chris_Ross_61861yrCommented
Wasn't the city only around for 100 years? If so this doesn't add up.
It was not unheard of for new students to challenge the top 100. However, the most recent one was a prodigious senior from a century ago. If Lin Feng could succeed and become an expert of the top 100 as a new student, he would definitely be the first in a century in the entire Myriad Academy! - Chris_Ross_61862yrCommented
The number scheme is constantly off. Sometimes it's right, a lot of times it's wrong.
"Ding, dong! You've obtained eight hundred thousand shadow points. You've also triggered a ten thousand times amplification and obtained eight million shadow points! - Chris_Ross_61862yrReplied to Sid3rite
Sad part is you have no idea what you're talking about. Capitalism isn't what caused the loss of building anywhere or hunting for food. Those aren't always allowed in non-capatist areas either, such as most of Europe, China, Japan, and many other places (I named Europe and Japan because they are not wholistically Capatilist). The loss of building wherever and hunting had more to do with population increases than the economy style. Take China which is known not to capitalist and with its huge population, you cannot just build or hunt anywhere you want. If you dislike an economic style that's fine but at least know your facts.
He found a nearby dark, damp and stinky alleyway, where people would throw their trash and was tired and now homeless, as he couldn't afford rent, so decided that he would sleep there. - Chris_Ross_61862yrCommented
heh 😏
"Sigh, it's shaking again…" - Chris_Ross_61862yrCommented
noice. pretty dope that you put your own real world knowledge of something that's not technically obscure but isn't well practiced into your story. as a fellow writer I truly dig it.
(Author Note: I saw that some readers don't believe in reading body language, and as a student of that type of study, I can properly say that this is truly functional. If you don't, YouTube is there to put an end to your doubts. I'm clearly not specialized so I can make small mistakes, but the general essence of what I'm going through tends to be correct, thanks. - Chris_Ross_61863yrReplied to Dyrem
Author, this is just an idea (may not be feasible due to time constraints or readily available people) but maybe looking into getting another author to proof read your work, share tips and feedback, and a basic editing. It may not work if you are pushing out 2+ chapters a day depending on the other person but it is a possibility. I know this because I used to be an avid writer on another site before I slowly drifted into becoming more of an editor. Now, I've taken a liking to branching out into the Eastern culture of writing and came to this site to read and understand better. I'd give it a thought but I'm not sure how feasible it may be for you in particular. -Hope you have a good day and keep on writing.