Dolbysminion

this is all over the place

a couple of weeks is a long time look at billy bad ass

are you going to post something soon just wanted to know cause I'm cleaning up my library

mach Jesus

You know all the crap and translations you have to shift through just to find a gem? look no further this legit and we'll done.

This is what fan fictions is suppose to be, i went through a dozen other dragon ball fan fics and they where complete crap this is really good. Are you coming back to write more?

man this is really well done

her head?

The grammar is a detractor the way the writer writes has no real immersion it's more like some guy off the street with no real understand of cadence is telling the story. overall its needs a serious consideration on the tone it wants to set in order for readers to immerse themselves in something believable.

more please 🙏