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he is meant to have a system. apart from the first few chapters, we haven't seen any other choices. what's the point of having it ,if it isn't used more than once
story so far is good. but when it comes to distance of skills its off, 15 meters is easily visible to the naked eye so having detection in that radius makes little sense. I would say make it 150 meters, at this distance things become smaller to the eye and can be more easily obscured by obstacles making detection more believable. but at the same time the distance is short enough that things can be hidden at a distance so as not to make the character all seeing.
I stand by my comment on the previous chapter, it still applies here. and if you say it is a law abiding society they live in the frist group was some sort of assassins and the second group could probably be subdued without killing. you might say she could not beat them all or she was training or something but there was no hint of that at all, she seems to always be in control of the situation so why does she let others take advantage.
seems every other person has supernatural powers at this point.but I don't understand why she didn't just kill the boss guy and the guy holding lin nan hostage she should have been able to take both their guns or at least save lin nan. She is meant to be strong and all but author is holding her back by letting bad guys take hostages.
this story has an interesting premise but plot amd character development is far to slow. The FL has a boatload of debt and her way to deal with it was I'll become a bar singer, and gamble at a shady casino, she could of used the internet to achive simular effects. Not to mention she has no solid plans on how she is going to get back to 'planet x' just a vague statement that she was going to. maybe the author has a plan on how its going to get better for the FL but i hate storylines where its a firefight every time the characters take a step.
she didn't want to deal with him yet still went to see him. I fail to understand the logic of this story. She even let herself be picked up by him without much of a struggle. I really don't understand why she lets herself get into these situations.