Blue_J_Writes
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Blue_J_Writes13dReplied to SamyOOI know I keep yapping on these chapters with my comments. But you're doing a good job. I'll try to turn down my yapping lol.
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Oof lol
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Maybe instead of having this here show us this later on or something. Just a thought.
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Ah I see. Kinda would’ve liked to see a moment where the personality change happened. But that might affect pacing negatively, so I don’t really know.
Honestly, it didn't bother him that her personality had changed. If she wanted to be close to him she wouldn't have had an attitude change and he wasn't the type that would be saddened by a change in his friend's personality. - Blue_J_Writes14dCommented
Do we find out how so? Like we get a glimpse at the level of close they used to be. But how did they grow apart?
He said the last word looking deeply into her yellow eyes before placing his hand back in his pocket and walking towards his room. He remembered how close they were when he first came here and recently, the distance between them just kept increasing. - Blue_J_Writes14dCommented
Good details here.
She had long brown hair that was packed in a high ponytail, yellow gem-like eyes, an oval face, small pink lips, beige-colored skin, and thin brown eyebrows. Despite her young age, she was a beauty who would make men of all ages look at her. - Blue_J_Writes14dCommented
Redded eyes? Like on the verge of crying?
Alistar soon turned to look at the saddened kids behind him. Some had reddened eyes, others could be seen with a sorrowful expression, while a few straight out balled their eyes out. - Blue_J_Writes14dReplied to SamyOO
I mean I’ve only seen this type of dialogue turn into something sus. But I’m trusting the process.
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Heads up you called both beast types here special grades.
They didn't evolve, dumb. they are created out of our negative emotions, the dark energy that was leaked during the sealing of the demons turns our negative emotions into beasts. the beasts also possess our bloodline ability, even evolving it an making it way stronger than ours. on rare occassions, two negative emotions create one beast, such beast will possess two bloodline abilities and they are known as special grades. When three negative emtions form a single beast, the beast will possess three bloodline abilities and is known as special grade. - Blue_J_Writes16dCommented
A little surprising.
Hahahhaaaa! I guess I can't do anything about that... a conviction is still a conviction, silly! do your best! - Blue_J_Writes16dCommented
Kinda funny lol
As they walked toward the orphanage, Alistar kept talking to Sylvia to stop her from pondering and whenever she asked about what he meant by third leg he'd look at the sky and say. "It's extremely beautiful." - Blue_J_Writes16dCommented
Little clunky and unbelievable but I don’t believe it matters much.
Easily changing the subject, Alistar didn't give Sylvia a chance to reply before he began walking. Knowing that she would keep pestering him until she got answers, Alistar began thinking of what to tell her. - Blue_J_Writes16dCommented
I almost want this character description before her dialogue.
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Sadly it comes out a little creepy. Might be because of the wording on the descriptive depth of it. If it’s a reoccurring joke for the two test some things so it doesn’t come across as weird/creepy.
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Is he audibly saying sigh? Also sus older brother????
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Common little sister dialogue.
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You deny your MC privileges it’s purpose. lol
That's right, he deemed all Ascenders as unlucky individuals. Having power is fun and all but when it comes with responsibilities it becomes a chore. Considering the responsibility that came with becoming an Ascender, Alistar would rather lose his family name than become one. - Blue_J_Writes4mthReplied to King_Of_SpaceTime
something to leave up to the imagination lol
"I can only imagine the sick names these people are forcing the AI to call them by." I said to myself. - Blue_J_Writes9mthReplied toCh 1 Chapter 1: The Final War - Part 1