Good chapter. The revision was a good change and made it clearer. Looking forward to the rest.

Probably bad luck but I give my stones either way. Great chapter too. Worthy of all my stones.

YES!!!!!!

Hahaha. Adulting does suck.

So I have been reading this since you started it in the weekly contest. Your writing has improved since then and i have contributed my stones because of your transparancy and story. I’d say go for the internship, gain more experience from it and do what you can on this. I will expect a shameless powerstone plug somewhere in the near future.

So good. The story is prgressibg really well and I like how much effort you’re putting into the character development.

This was so good. I want to know what happens.

I really like what youre doing with them. Ot nice getting the mindsets of the characters and their different perspectives

Honestly I like the different style. It’s slightly different but in a good way. The character development along with some action.

I liked the Chapter. It does seem a bit off though having Frey go from moody to confident Or at least thats what it seemed like. I could be wrong however

ThrowIng bombs?

Interesting person. knows Thomas somehow and even teaches them the Ratio to make a bomb with it.

Watch the hag be His aunt or something. Probably related on his mother’s side of the family. That or its his dad’s Ex. That would actually be pretty entertaining.