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although that seems awesome, id rather him go the thief route the mercenary group would be normal during the day robbers by night (why robber and not thief? because when you think of thief's you think pick-pocket but when you hear robber you imagine some dude getting robbed at gun point for every thing he has ex: wallet,phone,chain,necklace,watch,etc,etc) then kevin and ren meet up while ren is stealing then we have them fight and have the typical but awesome scene of ren being in the middle of a window and Kevin as he slowly backs up ¨not fast enough Kevin¨ as he pulls of his ski-mask just enough for Kevin to see then he...(the last one is what ren would do)
quick comment, about his EX rank recovery skill i feel like either you should bring down the rank to A~S or fix the part where it said he was scared of getting bones broken because if the bone healed wrong he might get a lame leg(pretty sure that is another way of saying ¨a limp that will never heal¨) i just think that a EX rank skill that is meant to have no drawbacks or limitations like the skills lower then it do should be able to heal all sorts of situations for ex: if his legs were to get steamrolled either his bone fragments should get put back in place to proceed healing or just regrow with no risk of them healing wrong.
hey, i dont know if you will read this any time soon but the fight scenes are a bit confusing and the constant use of Hindi or whatever language it is you are using (sorry if that seemed rude) is a bit irritating because having to check what a word meant is taking away form the experience and immersion that i know this book could have... so unless you have changed it in the upcoming chapters i recommend coming back and revising those parts.(hope you read this and not end up mad)
theory: khal and neo are the same person but because of the bracelet when he committed suicide it interfered somehow forcing his memories to be isolated but when neo got the bracelet from the old dude it brought back all the memories at the same time and but the bracelet being so strong decided to slowly isolate neo's soul and put it in the soul prison so the massive influx of info won't outright kill him probably the reason he had no memories when khal woke up .(one thing Nancy was the one who gave him the bracelet right? if yes then i think she was the one that was meant to have the bracelet along with its powers probably for the personal use of what ever organization the old man that gave the bracelet to neo and the old lady that gave the book to khal belong too.) but this is just a theory. good job with the novel its great so far.