Kyran_Ambrosius

More please. I give stones

Its really good. A bit short tho.

Whys he singing? Why did anyone give a child a drink? Wtf does anyone seem to be liking him. Hes just some asshole kid who stumbled in. And the biggest question WHY THE FUCK IS DEATHSTROKE THERE!!

Thats the question how did he get away because bruce would never let that happen. And theres no way he could ever do that.

SO RIGHT HERE "i somehow manage to avoid everyone, and leave the manor after a couple hours of walking make it inside a bar" No where here does it say its noonans. And to my knoweldge the iceberg lounge is the only upscale establishment that caters to villains and mobsters. And even then YOU NEVER ACTUALLY EXPLAIN SHIT! YOU JUST KEEP SHITTING ON PEOPLE WHO CRITIQUE YOUR SHIT. Your never gonna get better if you don't actually take other peoples advice. Because when it comes to writting it doesnt matter how good you think something is. If no one likes it or can understand wtf your sayin then its shit.

No

Why is he going along with any of this.

If he was found by bats hows he end up at the lounge.

This is gay as hell.