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I love any good story even if its roughly written as the plot will shine through. But there is nothing to describe a well written story, ahhh I think I may just love words.
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haha so true
at last someone who understands how to open a story!! I've lost count hiw many stories on the 10 min read list start something like...Giwan town in Xian providence, early morning. on a mountain road, chickens screetch and scratch the dirt....🙄 sigh. it murders the mood for me as a reader. the authors should read this chapter as an example on how to start with an inciting event so we can get the problems rolling. Thanks for writing for novel readers.
This chapter was tiresome to read. It is bogged down with long explanations of back story detail in unnatural dialogue. It's boring and hard to understand or even believe anyone would talk in such specific detail about things they both know. Sooo, I know backstory is needed, but a backstory dump, maybe not so much. Perhaps you can take a look at it, if not,okay. I'm just letting you know that it's easier to read a story if backstory details are scattered throughout and not dumped in a big dialogue paragraph. infer things and trust were smart enough to understand. Like a character saying thanks to Uncle for taking (good) care of them all these years since their parents died. no need to list everything he did. I won't remember it into the next chapter, and I suspect other readers won't either. But the heartfelt thanks of nephew and uncle's scolding over him blowing his inheritance shows he cares more than listing money amounts I don't recall or him scouring the house for stuff I don't know either, because i forgot. But it was important, but not really, because what really matters is the parents' death. See, let's get to that point. Even Uncle says don't be shallow, care about the parents death. That's where the story is.
but not as annoying as this last paragraph of dialogue. he is a rambling little guy. oh wait I get it now 🫨.... he might talk about what he is going to talk about so he can talk about something unrelated instead.🤭
no one talks like this. summarizing the last decade of their life to someone who helping them so already knows.🙄
she was scamming him, promising to pay thousands
A mega rich, super strong guy, under 30, shaming and rejecting the rich beauty queen that begs him ,again, to have her. Then he beats up her body guard in one punch so fast no one sees it. Uhhuh, total fantasy, it's fun to be all powerful. but If he's super strong, rich and already at the top now, why read about him? its totally unrelatable. oh, and in most of the dialogue, look at it and tell me, does anyone really talk like that in real life? . it's ok for a bit of it to weird, but when it's most of it is, it's tiresome to read.
rich super strong guy that steals random peoples cars it seems.
he'll be even cheaper...😏 his dialogue gives him away
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exactly, totally unrealistic plot point. what ARE you doing here?!
no queen would chase a man and beg she is in reality a bit desperate
the elder or the young man ? and are they talking potty trained? 🤭
when will we get to something besides movie script scene descriptions? where's the story?
another description for a film director to set up the scene, but this is a novel author not a script.😬
why would your 1st paragraph everyone reads of your story begin like this?? it's sounds like a scene description written to a film director.
why change the names now? just go back to chapter one and change them all for consistency
does he know how to make nuclear weapons!? 😳 I'm sure you don't because I don't despite being from his world.
this story.