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very effective and smooth. the exasperation from the last chapter is no longer visible now that the protag no longer feels it. in fact, it is replaced by excitement and intrigue. Adrian, an another comment said, is a beautiful hypocrite. His hypocrisy is so real, so common, yet somehow special in the way he handles it. His seeming contempt for Zirav, calling him a psychopath, when he himself has simply killed eight people and felt nothing about it. Him being interested in the play he acted like he had no care for. It's all such beautiful and cyclical storytelling.
It's a promising beginning. The author takes a very interesting approach with first person narrative where the protagonist's personality seeps into the narration and monologue so much that one is forced to wonder just how reliable of a narrator he is. Then, as the world and the story slowly keeps unfolding, more and more of is characterization comes to forefront by simply him narrating and reacting to things or commentating on a piece of history. He is, by far, the strongest part of the narrative, and we still don't know where his story is going but I've already become invested in the ride for sure. Overall, a very good main character-driven narrative. Keep up the good work!
This is a like a exasperation setting in after a big dose of adrenaline wears off (referring to the fighting in previous chapter) and a tiredness and numbness taking over the tone of the story just as they take over the protagonist's mind and body. Good job with continuing to assimilate the story and the protagonist together like this.
Good structure, with the transition from comedic beginning to sad ending (at the same time, I suppose it was Adrian with a mask of indifference towards everything and that mask breaking by the end). Adrian is interesting. He is a template for much potential but you'll really need to maneuver him well if he's not to end up generic. It will be an interesting journey. Keep it up!
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