I spend every fast pass I get everyday to read books and maybe one comic I have found myself liking. My issue is that I kinda suck at introductions. As for longer sentences, ive got that covered by a long shot compared to all the other writers ive noticed. Feelings would be based on how I would feel so in the sense of being the MC, that's pretty close to how I would react to things.

And how would you improve it? Ive asked for help on FB with other writers but they didnt give me any tips on how to improve it.