hmm..needs the encore chapter. Like what is Cole like as an expectant father? stuff.like that.

So, the layout for the story, the characters, the ideas all seem great. You do need a lot of grammatical editing, though. You're very descriptive of your characters and you flesh them out well. Unger the feeling that will one day be a great story, but right now its more of a rough draft. You need to have someone edit your works a little. Even having a friend, who also speaks English as a second or first language, read it and mark where some words are either misspelled or do not make sense. Otherwise, I would like to read more of this story, once it is finished.

So far, this book is pretty good. The characters are engaging. Id suggest the Author use italics for thoughts and not quotation marks. Usually quotations denote speech. Otherwise I getting pulled into the story. Oh, and more character description would be good. The scenery is described very well, but the people aren't.