I am a nerd, bookish girl
you're very welcome..😊 thanks for not being offended...😊 sometimes when I correct or help other authors with word choice or grammar; or when I give suggestions they tend to be offended a lot.😊
he sat in the middle of the living room.😉
- "he sat" would be the simpler way 😉
3-"two times" should be "two instances" or if in a more specific setting when it's a song or music sheet; segment, verse, note, scale, intonation, rhythm, tempo, lyric, articulation 😉
helping author-san 1- "four times" should be " fourth time" 2- "bluffed" should be "baffled"
I think it should be "theme song for the next Spiderman" not "music for the next Spiderman" 😉
this should be "remind you" not "remember you" 😉
Very nice story... The ML is a crackpot!!!!!!!!!!! His FL is a very very strong woman... The progression was nice, it wasn't fast or slow and no serious plot holes existed... A recommended read...
hate is a very strong word though... hmmmmmm... maybe a little grievance or some resentments, but you can totally make it up to me author-san with the next chapter...😉 though I don't know how you can make the story much better, I definitely would like to see Levi NOT ending up with Sam, Sam had been in my little black book of unmentionable people for a while now, so hopefully you'd pair up Levi with a better girl... just saying, though you can totally write your story the way you want too... just wishful thinking and a little bit of feedback...😉
I didn't like this chapter. If nothing ever happened with them at least have Levi be happy with another girl... Sam is seriously not good for him, I don't like girls who prance about and have *** with random people, I don't like thinking that Levi is gonna end up with a girl who had *** with many guys... it's not the Catholic in me talking, it's just weird... maybe it's the old soul in me talking but I would like Levi to have a pure girl, an innocent one, where her attention would be on Levi when his attention would be on her and not treating him like air just like what Sam did... please don't let Levi take the stalker route, and just let him let go of Sam,.. dear author please,!!! give your readers a break, and get on with it...
been binge reading since yesterday, and soooo far it's super lit!!!!!! the ML had a lot of funny interactions with the other characters and him being a small ***** is very entertaining...