Webnovel
0
France_Jaydon

France_Jaydon

Lv4

I am a nerd, bookish girl

2020-01-15 JoinedPhilippines
-d

Writing

229.1h

of reading

85

Read books

Badges6

Moments

252
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon16h
    Replied to Newbiel

    you're very welcome..馃槉 thanks for not being offended...馃槉 sometimes when I correct or help other authors with word choice or grammar; or when I give suggestions they tend to be offended a lot.馃槉

    He had sent a copy of the demo to the entire team asking what was their take on it. That was the four times that she was listening to it and Lucie quite liked it. She had noticed two times where the song could be better and had taken a mental note of it but she had nothing more to say about this. Truthfully, she was bluffed that he could be that talented in music when she knew his others areas of expertise. Even more when she knew he was doing the lyric and the melody arrangement himself. He was of course calling others musicians when he needed a special instrument but all the rest was just him.
    alt
    Immaculate Spirit
    Magical RealismNewbiel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon16h
    Commented

    very nice interactions between the pets and Nath's family...馃槉 had to shorten the name...馃槉

    Ch 236 :
    alt
    Immaculate Spirit
    Magical RealismNewbiel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon16h
    Replied to France_Jaydon

    he sat in the middle of the living room.馃槈

    He was sitting himself in the middle of the living room, his grandfather to his left and Andy to his right.
    alt
    Immaculate Spirit
    Magical RealismNewbiel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon16h
    Commented

    - "he sat" would be the simpler way 馃槈

    He was sitting himself in the middle of the living room, his grandfather to his left and Andy to his right.
    alt
    Immaculate Spirit
    Magical RealismNewbiel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon16h
    Replied to France_Jaydon

    3-"two times" should be "two instances" or if in a more specific setting when it's a song or music sheet; segment, verse, note, scale, intonation, rhythm, tempo, lyric, articulation 馃槈

    He had sent a copy of the demo to the entire team asking what was their take on it. That was the four times that she was listening to it and Lucie quite liked it. She had noticed two times where the song could be better and had taken a mental note of it but she had nothing more to say about this. Truthfully, she was bluffed that he could be that talented in music when she knew his others areas of expertise. Even more when she knew he was doing the lyric and the melody arrangement himself. He was of course calling others musicians when he needed a special instrument but all the rest was just him.
    alt
    Immaculate Spirit
    Magical RealismNewbiel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon16h
    Commented

    helping author-san 1- "four times" should be " fourth time" 2- "bluffed" should be "baffled"

    He had sent a copy of the demo to the entire team asking what was their take on it. That was the four times that she was listening to it and Lucie quite liked it. She had noticed two times where the song could be better and had taken a mental note of it but she had nothing more to say about this. Truthfully, she was bluffed that he could be that talented in music when she knew his others areas of expertise. Even more when she knew he was doing the lyric and the melody arrangement himself. He was of course calling others musicians when he needed a special instrument but all the rest was just him.
    alt
    Immaculate Spirit
    Magical RealismNewbiel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon16h
    Commented

    I think it should be "theme song for the next Spiderman" not "music for the next Spiderman" 馃槈

    The place had long been furnished with exquisite pieces of furniture and even the office had been turned into a private gym. That was where Lucie was at the moment, running at full speed on the treadmill, two earphones dangling from the side of her head proving that she was listening to music. It wasn't any music that she was listening to but Nathaniel's new single that will be the music for the next SpiderMan.
    alt
    Immaculate Spirit
    Magical RealismNewbiel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon16h
    Commented

    this should be "remind you" not "remember you" 馃槈

    "Don't play coy with me Lucie, I know you better than that but I must say it's a pleasant surprise to see you fight back for a change. I also must remember you that our annual reunion is next month, I would hate to see you miss it."
    alt
    Immaculate Spirit
    Magical RealismNewbiel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon18h
    Posted

    Very nice story... The ML is a crackpot!!!!!!!!!!! His FL is a very very strong woman... The progression was nice, it wasn't fast or slow and no serious plot holes existed... A recommended read...

    alt
    Crazy Detective
    Realistic FictionKuang Hai Wang Hu
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon18h
    Commented

    thanks for the chap!!

    Ch 590 The Return Of The Young Master
    alt
    I'm the King Of Technology
    Fantasylumydee
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon18h
    Replied to crackedcacti

    madame is right... or maybe my lady???

    Ch 590 The Return Of The Young Master
    alt
    I'm the King Of Technology
    Fantasylumydee
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon23h
    Replied to LazyOracle

    yeah... Daniel was a nice person..

    Ch 135 The Practical Joke
    alt
    100 Ways to Solve a Murder
    Realistic FictionVanlauredel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon23h
    Commented

    wishful thinking

    Ch 589 The Troubles Never Stop!
    alt
    I'm the King Of Technology
    Fantasylumydee
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon1d
    Replied to Vanlauredel

    hate is a very strong word though... hmmmmmm... maybe a little grievance or some resentments, but you can totally make it up to me author-san with the next chapter...馃槈 though I don't know how you can make the story much better, I definitely would like to see Levi NOT ending up with Sam, Sam had been in my little black book of unmentionable people for a while now, so hopefully you'd pair up Levi with a better girl... just saying, though you can totally write your story the way you want too... just wishful thinking and a little bit of feedback...馃槈

    Ch 135 The Practical Joke
    alt
    100 Ways to Solve a Murder
    Realistic FictionVanlauredel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon1d
    Replied to LazyOracle

    yup... Sam is seriously not a good girl... she has a lot of issues and Levi is better off without her.

    Ch 135 The Practical Joke
    alt
    100 Ways to Solve a Murder
    Realistic FictionVanlauredel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon1d
    Commented

    I didn't like this chapter. If nothing ever happened with them at least have Levi be happy with another girl... Sam is seriously not good for him, I don't like girls who prance about and have *** with random people, I don't like thinking that Levi is gonna end up with a girl who had *** with many guys... it's not the Catholic in me talking, it's just weird... maybe it's the old soul in me talking but I would like Levi to have a pure girl, an innocent one, where her attention would be on Levi when his attention would be on her and not treating him like air just like what Sam did... please don't let Levi take the stalker route, and just let him let go of Sam,.. dear author please,!!! give your readers a break, and get on with it...

    Ch 135 The Practical Joke
    alt
    100 Ways to Solve a Murder
    Realistic FictionVanlauredel
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon1d
    Replied to NotYourCat

    it's okay she'll be pretty and cute soon.

    Ch 83 Chapter 81 : New Year's eve celebration.
    alt
    Re: Child again.
    Realistic FictionXen_120598
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon1d
    Commented

    I guess, 10 yrs old???

    Ch 83 Chapter 81 : New Year's eve celebration.
    alt
    Re: Child again.
    Realistic FictionXen_120598
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon1d
    Posted

    been binge reading since yesterday, and soooo far it's super lit!!!!!! the ML had a lot of funny interactions with the other characters and him being a small ***** is very entertaining...

    alt
    Re: Child again.
    Realistic FictionXen_120598
    detail
  • France_Jaydon
    France_Jaydon1d
    Commented
    Ch 67 Chapter 66 : Spilling the beans. (1)
    alt
    Re: Child again.
    Realistic FictionXen_120598
    detail