Righttt...

ure kinda dumb

kinda being a hypocrite here

orrr is this another couple

Why did I think it was fang bai? Did he get the wrong person?

Perhaps you'd want to credit the original novel? Wonderful writing though. I felt that the imagery could be expanded further but otherwise a wonderful writing job.

When you switched the character POVs you used the exact same dialogue and text from the previous POV. So instead of making it a perspective, it seemed like you were jusy rewriting the same text again.

(;´༎ຶٹ༎ຶ`)

go to your hoe?

its alright

Wonderful. As a suggestion, when switching povs or looking at a scene from a different perspective, try highlight what the character feels instead of copying the dialogue. Perhaps some unsaid words?

Why did the author's comment seem a bit like Shu or Xavier in this arc? HMMMM Seems the characters have grown on you author san...(;´༎ຶٹ༎ຶ`)

hypocrite

julietans? Oooo

Depending on the situation, this could be considered a foreshadowing on the host merging identities unknowingly hinting at a much greater reasoning behind his transmigration. On the other hand it could just be a pronoun error or inconsistency...

MANN I LOVR THE FLUFF

yesyes +1 new reader...

AHAHAHSHDJAB i love it, just my type of novvwl wikedjejd. It is wonderfully written, there is a lot of vocabulary which wouldn't be commonly associated with a first-timer. I absolutely love the characters and their development, particularly enjoying the way you depicted the growth of characters so subtly. Wonderfully done! I swrarrr i cihdl hear the characters talk

ah yes the art of cuten- seduction

dhar man