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nome_cognome8hCommentedHere too you repeated the name too often. The first rayleigh was enough imo. English is not my first language but reading the names repeated so often feels off. Correct me if i'm wrong though
Rayleigh poured more aura into his sword to raise the number of transformed sword auras circulating the blade, sharpening and strengthening the edge. Rayleigh used Shū, Kō, and Ryū to strengthen his muscles, but upon receiving the impact of T-Bone's sword, he realized it had been overkill since the frighteningly tall man was weaker than Rayleigh's base stats.- nome_cognome8hCommented
hm, you could reduce the use of name and replace them with "he", "him" and the like. the chapters would flow better. In this paragraph you repeated t-bone like 4 times but 2 was more than enough imo.
T-Bone realized that what Rayleigh used was different from what T-Bone knew, but he could also tell how dangerous it was. If he did not cut those lines, they would cut him in half. Rayleigh could also release them without a flashy, inefficient swing like T-Bone had, so the Captain understood that he was at a disadvantage. T-Bone shouted, "FLYING BIRDS," and made a strong, horizontal slash. His sword intent scattered into a dozen lines that each made a right angle that switched up and down, making each line of light look like a flapping bird. - nome_cognome1dReplied to smilesssss
Was there a weekly schedule? i recall many chapters being released with just 1 or 2 days between them.
Chapter 65 The Swordsmanship of One Piece - nome_cognome1dCommented
i mean, it's hard to beat shooting lightning from your fingers
Be honest, which is cooler? Sending lightning from your fingertips, or swinging bolts of lighting from your blade? - nome_cognome1dCommented
man, imagine how tanky he'll be with armament haki on top of this. to not mention the fact that his nen abilities will only keep growing
The hundreds of sword intent fragments struck Rayleigh head-on, causing tiny bursts of light on each collision. Too bad none of them made it through Rayleigh's Ren. As an Enhancer, Rayleigh could easily enhance the defensive aspect of his Ren to the point he was bullet-proof against high powered rifles. These sword intent fragments had less power than a bullet and against his Ren, the quantity did not make up for the lack in quality. - nome_cognome1dCommented
Whoever said that the jedi class is useless was clearly reading a different story. Like hell, his jedi abilities did most of the heavy lifting so far. Great chapter by the way, i can't wait for him to use all three classes together. It's amazing to see how well they mix togheter and haki will likely add to the mix seamlessly.
Ch 65 Chapter 65 The Swordsmanship of One Piece - nome_cognome3dCommented
I really like daniel's work ethic. I love no nonsense mc's but yeah he should relax once in a while. This story also made me rethink about superman and the idiocity of making him work as a journalist when there are people dying all over the world every minute.
Ch 16 16: State of mind - nome_cognome3dReplied to RustyBoi
there are quite a few players on the marine's side iirc. the mc too should be on their side or at worst he'll be neutral and fight everyone lol.
And of course, there were the issues with the other Players. I realized way too late that I threw them into the Grand Line too early. It would not make any sense for the Players who entered the Grand Line 2 years before Luffy to take part in the War of Marineford like I initially intended so I had to move some things around and explain that as well. It took me a dozen drafts to figure out how to get that info dump through in the way that least seemed like an info dump. For the record, the current timeline is 4 months before Luffy departs and 16 months before that war. - nome_cognome3dReplied to RustyBoi
the war will change a lot even just with the players. The mc has more than a year to train with haki and swordmanship. he will likely become a nightmare by the time the war starts. Players like dragon chef too are quite strong, so if you also add the emperors things would get too messy.
And of course, there were the issues with the other Players. I realized way too late that I threw them into the Grand Line too early. It would not make any sense for the Players who entered the Grand Line 2 years before Luffy to take part in the War of Marineford like I initially intended so I had to move some things around and explain that as well. It took me a dozen drafts to figure out how to get that info dump through in the way that least seemed like an info dump. For the record, the current timeline is 4 months before Luffy departs and 16 months before that war. - nome_cognome3dReplied to Luft_Rauser
His lightsaber is different though, he replaced the blade with a nen one. His blade now is made entirely of nen and acts like a chainsaw iirc. The mc said that it should be capaple of cutting anything conceptually, but it is limited by his power, so the sharpness depends on his skill with nen. Initially it was worse than a normal lightsaber but by now it might have surpassed it, or maybe not but either way he has a lot of room for growth. There is also the swrdmanship from one piece to consider. Do remember that zoro could cut steel with steel without damaging his swords, which means that the mc can cut things beyond the limits of his blade. Armament Haki too should enhance the blade but i'm not sure about this since it's made of energy, so i dunno how haki would interact with it
Ch 64 Chapter 64 The Sea King Tide - nome_cognome3dCommented
Hopefully this pause will take less time.
At least until the Clone Wars. At that point, I'll need to pause and re-watch every episode of every season and write down a plot for Rayleigh and the other Players to do during that time. Suggestions are welcomed. - nome_cognome3dCommented
i think you did a good job. i liked the chapter, it didn't feel too info dumpy imo.
But I did it! I got through all the plot holes and I'll try to write chapters as often as I can again. - nome_cognome3dReplied to RustyBoi
what's balance? is it tasty? -Oda, probably
And this brought up yet another issue. I had an idea of how Haki, Nen, and the Force would interact, but later I realized that I completely missed something. Sword users in One Piece make even less sense than HAKI! Try re-watching the One Piece fight of Mr. One versus Zoro. There is a scene where Mr. One sends a dozen slashes at Zoro which chops the pillar behind Zoro into pieces but Zoro seems to ignore the damage and then cuts through Mr One and wins. How did he do this? Apparently, by hearing the breath of Mr One's swords he avoided the damage and by doing the same he was able to cut through him. So yeah, One Piece Swordsman Logic allows them to cut metal using metal by being able to hear the breath of metal. I had to figure out how to incorporate that in Ray's future fights. - nome_cognome3dCommentedCh 64 Chapter 64 The Sea King Tide
- nome_cognome5dReplied to Unknown_To_AllCh 21 Chapter 21 Oscorp Part 3/3
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- nome_cognome6dReplied to TRexCh 15 15: Discoveries