BalsamicThunThighs
I'm a book worm whose starting on his own journey of writing his first novel. Will I ever finish it? Definitely, just wait and see.
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BalsamicThunThighs16hReplied to vivavergilNot to forgot not recognizing her son and putting her arm around his neck. Yeah that's a terrible reunion
"A huge surprise, for sure," Killian responded, still feeling the terror Michael's mother had inflicted by merely spreading her presence through the entire room. 'No wonder Michael is so strong. His mother is a monster!'- BalsamicThunThighs16hCommented
She did strangle him lol
"No. I won't give him to you. If you want Danny's Living Soul, you will have to take it from my dead body!" Michael responded, his teary eyes turning menacingly ice-cold, "But I'm not sure if you're ready to kill me or not. I wouldn't be surprised if you could do it." - BalsamicThunThighs17hCommented
Alas the tags do not lie. No Harem. So I suppose it'll probably be one of them or someone you introduce later into the story.
His body tensed up and he turned around, just to see two beauties sitting on his bed- Maria Seraph and Alice Zenovia. - BalsamicThunThighs2dPosted
I'm starting to wonder if everyone is hopping onto this [ ] POV trend just to ride on its coattails to get noticed. (Which feels like the case) First, it was the Extra's POV, then the System's POV, and now this? Just to give a heads up, once this reaches 100 chapters, I'll delete this and give a more in-depth review assuming it's still interesting to me. Now, there's not much for me to go by at the moment from the first few chapters sadly. Our MC Nova isn't exactly anything new. Tragic backstory, gets a system, a cool power and from the tags we know, he'll eventually find some love. That's great and all but there is something I noticed right away that kept bugging me as I slowly went from chapter to chapter. It kind of felt like one whole giant run-on sentence. Also a heads up. If you think I'm being rude for giving it two stars for writing quality it's only because it was a bit difficult to read the first few chapters. Now this can certainly change in the future as long as the author perseveres in his writing but ai suppose we'll find out soon. Do I recommend this novel? I think it's worth a try at least. Just a heads up that the first chapter was rough. Even if it does say it's edited. Score: 6.9 out of 10. A for effort! Let's see where this story goes. Personal Score: N/A yet.
- BalsamicThunThighs2dReplied to KingCrimSoon
Nova is a her?
Intelligence: 1-14 - BalsamicThunThighs2dCommented
Sounds like a load of bull but let's roll with it!
[System suffers great damage, to function, the System separates itself from its creator and enters completely into the host's soul to survive] - BalsamicThunThighs2dCommented
The amount of noticeable commas and long drawn out sentences did break me out of immersion a couple of times. It gives the impression of a rough first draft chapter if I had to be honest. Hopefully, when you improve down the line in your writing you can do another edit to this chapter because it certainly would benefit a ton from it.
Ch 1 Foreword [Edited] - BalsamicThunThighs2dCommented
This feels like a run on sentence with how long it is.
Nova, also known in the gaming community as Lord Noah, The Scarlet Assassin, was one of the first players of Legend Genesis, he doesn't know why, but when he saw it, he had a tremendous need to play the game, so he bought its beta version and started playing it day and night, he doesn't even know how much time passed, but he kept playing non-stop, without leaving his room. - BalsamicThunThighs3dPosted
120 chapters in, and you should expect a reincarnated baby to toddler to little kid being very close to hitting that overpowered tag but just not cutting it. Slight Spoilers ahead. So this novel was finally completed, and I thought I'd finally give it a try. (P.S. I just grabbed the books from Amaz. cause it was cheaper that way) Just a disclaimer I have read about half of the authors' works, so it's always an interesting find to see similarities between the MCs and their similar thought processes but that's not exactly what you're in here for. So, let's get down to it. Is the novel good? I say yes, it's pretty enjoyable. It's like a B+ war movie that feels like it's always constantly moving. The MC is always training to the point that it feels like he has a problem. Is that a bad thing? Not exactly. Peers his age are already behind him and it's only a matter of time before he surpasses those a few years older than him. Though If I had to explain to someone about this novel, I'd say it's a reincarnation story about a baby to an adults life who feels like there's always going to be a problem around the corner. MC gets no rest at all. it's always training, grinding, and leveling up at a pace that feels like it's trying to speed run. Side characters are okay, but nothing memorable at the moment. No best girl at all in site yet. With the atmosphere feeling like it's the end of the world around the corner, sometimes I feel like I need to read a slice of life chapter for a second. I won't say it's not exactly in there, but even the rest periods feel like training montages. Also No harem in site and no romance as of yet either. Like I said, I'm at his toddler kid age, so I'll see what happens from there, but so far, so good. Just a heads up that if you like a slow paced type of adventure to becoming strong fast, this likely isn't for you. Score 8.0 out of 10 Personal Score 8.0 out of 10
- BalsamicThunThighs3dReplied to ViciousPepperCh 270 Chapter 270- Bumping into the mysterious girl
- BalsamicThunThighs4dReplied to Edgy_saucer
You mean the fact that he's a 6 year old physically but a 25 year old mentally trying to reason behind every single thing and moment? Yeah it's quite common with how the author does his writing style lol
At first, Rain couldn't help but question the truth behind his grandfather's claims of monster attacks in the area. It seemed far-fetched and outlandish to believe that such creatures could exist in their peaceful countryside. He wondered if his grandfather was merely trying to keep him from leaving. It seemed like a cheap way to do that by targeting other people that he cherished. - BalsamicThunThighs4dCommented
He's like a super toddler. My goodness
"Ah… my head," Rain said while a massive headache was bothering him. "Is everything all right?" - BalsamicThunThighs4dReplied to Bob_Grape
not yet
Still, that didn't mean that Rain had to forgive how they treated his little sisters as if they were air. Rain felt that a relationship between members of the same family didn't have to be like others where there were always people seeking to gain something from the other… - BalsamicThunThighs4dCommented
I really wanna see the stats of other kids now lol
Strength: 127 - BalsamicThunThighs4dCommented
Please appraise Toast. ..
Door: it is a door. - BalsamicThunThighs4dCommented
In starting to feel you have a fetish for dragons in your novels destroying the place. lol
In the distance, massive creatures soared through the sky, capturing Rain's attention. These majestic beings breathed out fierce flames, creating a spectacle of fire and light. With an overwhelming realization, Rain confirmed that they were indeed dragons, their enormous forms and fiery breath leaving no room for doubt. The sight of these awe-inspiring creatures filled Rain with a mix of astonishment and excitement. - BalsamicThunThighs4dReplied to Space_kook
Lol as much as I would've continued reading it I dropped it because of this. I kind of came to know if a novel has any small flags that keep on piling up I just drop it cause it's not fun anymore.
[Physical Constitution: 72] - BalsamicThunThighs4dReplied to MisterBombasticCh 104 Do you want to become stronger?
- BalsamicThunThighs4dCommented
So this isn't Xie Meiling???? Why is he calling her mom then? I know she's mommy too but it's confusing lol
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