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in no realistic universe would i support a Sansa as she is simpleminded in her dreams irrespective of everything she suffered due to her own follies. Cersei is like Frankenstein level of idiocy.

I am confused by your plot. once he disregarded his future knowledge, he suffered for two years and broke down his own family. Now no one with a common sense will ever in their right mind with proper sanity will ever disregard Voldemort and will take him down immediately with utmost ruthlessness as him living is a danger to thousands if not millions. it's either you are prolonging the story for the sake of it or your characterization either flawed or moronic. please don't take this as mentioned flaming you but consider this a blunt maybe unnecessarily harsh truth. I wish you lots of luck in your future endeavours.

you know i absolutely loved the premise of this story, yet i am very disappointed with Cole's seeming lackadasicle manner and indifference to Jeremy parents legacy being trashed and spit upon. I guess that's what happens when the isekaid person believes himself to be different from the original character. this is leading to plotline holes and reader frustration. just because he is getting money and anything he needs from the system shouldn't mean reclamation be on a back burner. iIhope you will change the character arc. I mean he resonantes more with a character template rather than the original soul of Jeremy's. hope you do better going on

no. of killers may be the same yet the number of victims will decrease

you know Hagrid is one character who even die hard haters can't hate because of his personality, kindness, protectiveness, etc. I know being reborn will be awkward but you completely disregarded a bond between father and son, that father who protected his son till his death, that father who consoled his son after facing racism due to being a half giant, who never abandoned him like his mother, and completely destroyed that bond. there is a difference between being ambitious and being callous. you created a callous character who lust after what he can achieve disregarding the central character in his growth till it's too late to correct his mistake. if you have any modicum of whats an appropriate family relation apply them in your works else learn instead of burying your head in the sand like an ostrich by naming this review as not constructive criticism and a harsh and cruel review

Moreover, military veterans are known for their discipline. although they enjoy life they immediately revert back to a disciplined and focused mindset. So either he has lost all his military training and developmental traits or he is an unmindful, foolish and negligent personality that disgraces the respect earned by the uniform

you know when I first started reading this fic I really loved it. but going on I don't see any maturity or seriousness expected from a veteran. yes he is living his dream life but no responsible and dedicated military personnel who has not gone rogue or lost his mind will always try to minimise collateral damage. collateral damage is acceptable in times of need or missions. but in chapter 40 Julian destroyed the home of many electric Pokemon just because of his list for battle. he could have challenged zapdos and gone to an isolated location for battle. he is turning more and more despicable in his blind devotion of living life.

i absolutely adore your story. in real life it may not be possible but atleast in fanfictions true justice can be done to the victims even if you have to be a vigilante. I hope you can write a similar one in Marvel as well. also I am quite curious if need be how you will portray a protagonist in the game of thrones as a stark i.e., world building, justice oriented, etc. anyways best of luck. bye