The Grammer itself is really good and the writing quality is okay but the story telling is evidently amateurish. Additionally this isn't anything new, it's just another danmachi fic with the 'Psyker' powers inserted. Which is the problem the writer doesn't understand how Psyker powers in 40k work. You could literally replace this with dnd magic system and it would be the same novel. I'm gonna come back and delete this review if the psyker powers actually become accurate to 40k with their associated risks.

I'm really enjoying the book, it's nice to see the middle of the book expanding and I'm looking forward to how you'll integrate the two dynamics though I expect it to be quite the challenge.